Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words (e.g., "umm", "uh"). Also watch verb tenses (use past tense when describing childhood) and word order ("I preferred riding in parks because they were safer").

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it everywhere in my neighborhood, but I preferred cycling in parks because they were quieter and safer than the streets.

提案: Answer directly, then give a specific reason or example using linking words. Remove fillers and use more natural expressions (e.g., "bicycles" or "motorbikes" depending on context). Be specific about what makes them popular (cost, convenience, traffic).

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, many people use them for short trips because they are inexpensive and can navigate heavy traffic more easily than cars.

× Well I do have a bike.

✓ Well, I had a bike.

The examiner asked about having a bike when the student was a child (past time). The verb should match past reference; using present tense 'do have' is incorrect. Change to past tense 'had' to match the time frame. Suggestion: use past simple for past situations (I had a bike).

× When I was a child I used to ride my bike all over the streets and I prefer going for a ride by for a ride on a bike in parks that because it is a safer.

✓ When I was a child I used to ride my bike all over the streets, and I preferred going for a ride on a bike in parks because it was safer.

Multiple issues: the sentence mixes past ('used to') with present ('prefer'). Because speaker describes past habits, maintain past tense: change 'prefer' to 'preferred' (past) and 'is' to 'was'. Remove duplicate phrase 'for a ride' and correct preposition 'on a bike'. Also 'a safer' is ungrammatical; use 'safer' alone. Suggestion: keep consistent tense and avoid repetition and incorrect article use.

× In my opinion, bikes are very popular in my country as umm, there are a lot of bikes on roads and uh, these uh bikes are the most common vehicle which are seen on the roadside.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are very popular in my country because there are a lot of bikes on the roads, and these bikes are the most common vehicles seen on the roadside.

Problems include article and plural agreement: use 'the roads' and plural 'vehicles' to match subject. 'Which are seen' is wordy; use reduced relative clause 'seen'. 'As umm' is informal filler; replace 'as' with 'because' for clarity. Ensure noun-verb agreement and correct articles. Suggestion: use 'the roads', plural 'vehicles', and concise relative clauses.