Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (past tense and subject-verb agreement), keep answers concise (max 5 sentences), and add a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, because, so, and therefore) and more precise vocabulary (e.g., met many people, got exercise).

例: I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn't afford one. Instead, I walked to school every day, so I had plenty of exercise and often met friends along the route. Because of those walks, I made many local friends and enjoyed the time outdoors.

提案: Use correct tense and agreement, avoid repetition, and start with a clear topic sentence answering the question. Provide one specific reason or example to support your opinion and use linking words (for example, however, although, because).

例: Yes, bikes have been quite popular in the Philippines, especially in smaller towns, because they are an affordable way to get around. Although my family couldn't buy one, many of my classmates owned bikes, which they used to commute to school and visit friends on weekends.

× No, we don't have a bike, my parents could not afford one.

✓ No, we didn't have a bike; my parents could not afford one.

The question asks about the past (when you were a child), so the verb should be in the past tense. Using 'don't have' (present) is inconsistent. Change to 'didn't have' to match past time reference; also use a semicolon or period to separate independent clauses.

× That's why I was preferred to go walking.

✓ That's why I preferred to go walking.

'Was preferred' is passive and incorrect here. The student is the agent who chose to walk, so the active past tense 'preferred' is correct. Use 'preferred to go walking' or better 'preferred to walk.'

× I prefer walking, I walk going to school, I walk with my friends and then through that walking I was able to meet a lot of person and enjoy my time walking and exercise as well.

✓ I preferred walking; I walked to school and with my friends, and through that walking I was able to meet many people and enjoy my time walking and exercising as well.

The context is past, so verbs should be past tense: 'preferred,' 'walked.' 'I walk going to school' is ungrammatical; use 'I walked to school.' 'A lot of person' is wrong for number and article; use 'many people.' 'Exercise' should be the gerund 'exercising' to match 'enjoy.'

× Back in the days, bikes are very popular in the Philippines.

✓ Back in the day, bikes were very popular in the Philippines.

Use past tense 'were' to describe a past time. Also the idiom is 'back in the day' (singular) rather than 'back in the days.'

× It's just that my parents could not afford one.

✓ It's just that my parents could not afford one.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change needed. It correctly uses past tense to explain reason.

× That's why I don't have.

✓ That's why I didn't have one.

The student uses present tense 'don't have' while referring to the past. Use past tense 'didn't have.' Also add 'one' to complete the idea (one bike).

× But most of my friends or neighbors that is around my age do have a lot of bikes at their homes.

✓ But most of my friends or neighbors who are around my age have many bikes at their homes.

Use 'who' for people instead of 'that.' Subject-verb agreement: 'neighbors ... are' not 'is.' 'Do have a lot of bikes' is wordy; 'have many bikes' is clearer. Keep present tense here if describing a general current truth about friends.

× But I did not regret not having one.

✓ But I did not regret not having one.

Sentence is grammatically correct: past tense 'did not regret' matches the narrative. No change needed.

× I enjoyed walking with my friends.

✓ I enjoyed walking with my friends.

This sentence correctly uses past tense 'enjoyed' to match the context. No change needed.