Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify and simplify your answer. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike. Then give one or two brief supporting details (reason and current situation). Use correct verb tenses and avoid repetition. Keep to about 2–4 sentences and use linking words like "because" or "but" to connect ideas.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I didn't know how to ride. However, I have a bicycle now, so I can ride it for exercise and short trips. This makes getting around my neighborhood much easier.

提案: Make your answer more fluent and specific. Begin with a clear opinion, then give one or two specific reasons (for example: lack of public transport in rural areas, low cost, convenience). Reduce fillers ("um", "uh") and correct grammar (use gerund or infinitive properly). Use linking words like "because" and "so".

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because public transport is often limited in rural areas, so many people rely on bicycles for daily travel. Bikes are also inexpensive and easy to maintain, which makes them a practical choice for short trips.

× I don't know how to buy whenever whenever child because I could not ride a bike at that time. Now we were I have a bicycles.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I could not ride one at that time. Now I have a bicycle.

Multiple sentence structure problems: incorrect tense, word order, extra words, incorrect pronouns and articles, and pluralization. The student mixed present and past (use past for childhood: 'didn't have'), repeated words ('whenever whenever') should be removed, and 'we were I have a bicycles' is ungrammatical—use 'Now I have a bicycle.' Also 'a bicycles' is wrong article+plural; use singular 'a bicycle'. Suggestion: decide on past for childhood experiences and write clear simple sentences: 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I couldn't ride one then. Now I have a bicycle.'

× Yes, I think like it's more popular in my country because, umm, public vehicles, uh, are not uh, available in. Local areas and so many people prefer to riding bike when.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are more popular in my country because public transport is not available in many local areas, so many people prefer to ride bikes.

Problems include incorrect preposition placement ('available in. Local areas' should be 'available in many local areas'), unnecessary filler words, awkward phrasing ('prefer to riding bike when'), and verb form error after 'prefer to' (use base form 'ride'). Also 'public vehicles' is better as 'public transport'. Suggestion: remove fillers, fix preposition order, and use correct verb form after 'prefer to': 'prefer to ride bikes.'