Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (past tense), reduce hesitations, and give a clearer, slightly longer answer with a topic sentence and one supporting detail. Use past-tense verbs and one linking word to connect ideas.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents thought it was dangerous. For example, they were worried I might fall on the busy streets near our home, so they preferred I walked or used public transport instead.

提案: Make the answer more coherent and specific: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people use bicycles for daily travel because cities are flat and cycling is cheap, and even older people often ride bikes to go to the market or visit friends.

× No, I don't have a bike when I'm child because my parent, uh, saw it's dangerous for me and uh, I, I didn't like, uh yeah, I think it's dangerous.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents thought it was dangerous for me and I didn't like it; yes, I think it's dangerous.

Errors: incorrect verb tense and pronoun forms. 'I don't have' should be past tense 'I didn't have' to match 'when I was a child' (Past tense issue, ID 5). 'I'm child' should be 'I was a child' (Incorrect use of pronouns and past tense, IDs 12 and 5). 'my parent' should be plural 'my parents' because it likely refers to both or is more natural (Singular and plural issue, ID 1). 'saw it's dangerous' is incorrect; use 'thought it was dangerous' (Incorrect use of verbs and past participle/past tense, IDs 9 and 5). 'I didn't like, uh yeah, I think it's dangerous': combine and correct to 'I didn't like it; yes, I think it's dangerous' to supply the missing object 'it' (Sentence structure and pronoun reference, IDs 26 and 12). Suggestions: keep consistent past tense for descriptions of childhood, use correct subject-verb agreement and plural nouns, use clear pronoun references (use 'it' to refer to 'a bike'), and replace colloquial 'saw' with 'thought' or 'felt' for opinion in the past.

× Yeah, it's popular in my country because I live in yes and yes, famous for bike and people, uh, go everywhere with bike, uh, and old people, uh, ride a bike.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because I live in a place famous for bikes and people go everywhere by bike, and older people also ride bikes.

Errors: incorrect verb forms, articles, and word order. 'It's popular' is vague; use 'bikes are popular' to match the subject (Singular and plural issue and subject-verb agreement, IDs 1 and 27). 'I live in yes and yes' is unclear; replace with 'I live in a place' (Sentence structure error, ID 26). 'famous for bike' needs plural and an article: 'famous for bikes' (Article and singular/plural issues, IDs 22 and 1). 'go everywhere with bike' should be 'go everywhere by bike' (Incorrect use of prepositions, ID 11). 'old people, uh, ride a bike' is better as 'older people also ride bikes' to match plural and natural phrasing (Singular and plural and adjective use, IDs 1 and 13). Suggestions: use plural nouns when referring generally, choose correct prepositions (by bike), keep consistent present simple tense for general facts, and avoid filler words.