Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve fluency and reduce hesitations; give a clearer topic sentence and one specific supporting detail. Keep it within 2–3 concise sentences and avoid filler words like "uh." Use a connecting phrase to add a detail.

例: Yes, I did. I had a blue bicycle that I rode almost every afternoon around my neighborhood, which helped me learn balance and made it easy to visit friends nearby.

提案: Speak with more confidence and reduce repetition. Start with a direct answer, then give one or two specific observations or reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Avoid repeating phrases like "I think" twice.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people cycle for exercise and short commutes; for example, I see dozens of cyclists in the park every morning and bike lanes are common in the city center.

× I had a bike and uh, used to ride it on the streets of my city in childhood.

✓ I had a bike and used to ride it on the streets of my city when I was a child.

The original sentence uses 'in childhood', which is non-idiomatic. This is not in the provided list directly, but the issue is sentence structure/word choice. The correction uses a proper time expression 'when I was a child' to match past habitual action expressed by 'used to'. Suggestion: use common time phrases (when I was a child) for clarity and naturalness.

× I think, yes, when I walk in the park every morning, I, uh, uh, very often see people riding bikes.

✓ Yes, I think so. When I walk in the park every morning, I very often see people riding bikes.

The original sentence had disfluent filler words and punctuation that broke sentence flow. The tense (simple present) is appropriate for habitual actions, but the structure needed smoothing: place 'Yes, I think so.' as a short response and then a separate sentence for the habitual observation. Suggestion: remove filler words and split into two clear sentences to improve grammatical coherence and fluency.

× So I think it's uh, very popular in my country.

✓ So I think it is very popular in my country.

The contraction 'it's' is acceptable, but the filler 'uh' interrupts the sentence. This is primarily a fluency/structure issue: remove filler to produce a clear declarative statement. Suggestion: avoid filler noises in written or formal responses and use full forms or clear contractions for clarity.