Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Expand slightly to give a brief topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use a full sentence and add a specific memory or reason to make the answer more informative and natural. Keep it under five sentences and use linking words if you add details.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle that my parents bought me when I was seven, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend. It helped me learn balance and made me feel independent.

提案: Give a complete, grammatically correct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details and a linking word to explain why. Avoid vague phrases like 'other countries' without examples. Use relevant vocabulary (e.g., infrastructure, traffic safety) and keep it concise.

例: Bikes are somewhat popular in my country, but not as much as in many European countries. For example, because there is limited cycling infrastructure and traffic can be dangerous, many people prefer cars or public transport instead.

× Is popular, but not as popular as in European or other countries because the traffic in my country is quite dangerous for a bike.

✓ They are popular, but not as popular as in European or other countries because the traffic in my country is quite dangerous for bikes.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and has inconsistent noun number and article use. Start with a subject that matches the question (bikes), use the plural noun 'bikes' consistently, and avoid singular 'a bike' when speaking generally. Use 'They are popular' to refer back to 'bikes' from the question. Also 'in European or other countries' is clearer as 'in European or other countries' while 'for a bike' should be 'for bikes' when referring to biking in general. Suggestion: maintain subject-verb structure and consistent plural forms when talking about general habits or things.