Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence ("No, I didn’t have a bike as a child."), then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repeating phrases and unclear expressions. Improve coherence by using connectors like "because" or "so" and provide a concrete example or brief result.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents thought it was unsafe. For example, they worried about traffic near our home, so I usually walked to school instead.

提案: Answer directly then support with specific reasons and examples. Begin with a clear opinion ("Yes, bikes are popular."). Use linking words like "because" or "for example" and give concrete details (e.g., reasons for popularity, who rides them). Avoid vague fragments and repetition; keep to two or three sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many people commute by motorbike in my city, and my brother even collects vintage bikes as a hobby.

× Umm, actually no.

✓ Umm, actually no.

No grammatical error that matches the provided problem types is present in this short response. It is a correct fragment; no change needed.

× When I was a kid my parents didn't allow me to buy a bike or move or sit in the bike because it is very harmful and it is not a thing kind of thing.

✓ When I was a kid my parents didn't allow me to buy a bike or ride one because they thought it was very dangerous and not appropriate for me.

Problems: sentence uses awkward verbs and tenses and incorrect pronoun references. Relevant grammar types: past tense issue (5) and incorrect use of pronouns (12). Corrections: use past simple consistently ('didn't allow') and change 'move or sit in the bike' to 'ride one' which is the correct verb for using a bicycle. Replace 'it is very harmful' with 'they thought it was very dangerous' to agree in number with 'parents' and to reflect reported belief in past. Avoid vague phrase 'not a thing kind of thing' and use 'not appropriate for me'. Suggestion: keep past tense for both main and reported verbs, use correct verb for bicycle actions ('ride'), ensure subject-verb agreement and clear phrasing.

× Actually yes and I also prefer bikes because and in my country it is where and in our city country it is very popular and I like also and many people in our country like the collection of bikes.

✓ Actually, yes. I also prefer bikes because they are very popular in my country and in my city, and many people here enjoy collecting bikes.

Problems: mixed and incorrect present tense use (6), incorrect pronoun/subject references (12), and sentence structure errors (26). Corrections: break into clearer sentences, use present simple for general facts ('are very popular', 'enjoy'), replace vague 'it is where' and 'our city country' with 'in my country and in my city', change 'like the collection of bikes' to 'enjoy collecting bikes' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use clear subject 'they' to refer to 'bikes', maintain consistent present simple for general truths, and simplify structure.

× My brother also like the like to collect bikes and I.

✓ My brother also likes to collect bikes, and I do too.

Problems: third person singular verb form error (2) and sentence structure error (26). Correction: use 'likes' to agree with singular subject 'my brother' and add 'do too' to complete comparison with 'I'. The original 'the like to collect' is redundant and ungrammatical—remove extra words. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement for third person singular and complete the clause when comparing activities ('and I do too').