Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, verb tense and add brief detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then one supporting detail. Use linking words if adding more than one idea. Keep it natural and concise (no more than 5 sentences).

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle with training wheels when I was about six, and I learned to ride it in our neighborhood park. Later, I upgraded to a bigger bike and rode it to school sometimes.

提案: Correct grammar and sentence structure, use linking words and specific details. Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give reasons and an example. Avoid redundancy and fix prepositions/articles and verb forms. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. Many people ride bikes at the weekend for exercise and leisure, and cities have cycling paths that make it convenient. For example, I cycle every Saturday to a riverside park where I meet friends and exercise.

× 'Yes, I do have a bike.'

✓ 'Yes, I had a bike.'

'Had' is needed because the examiner asked about the past (when you were a child). The original uses present tense 'do have', which contradicts the time reference. Use the past simple to match 'when you were a child'. Suggestion: replace present simple with past simple for past time frames.'

× 'Yes, it's popular on my country because a lot of people using the bicycle when weekends like like I do, I use my bicycle every weekend to exercise and to hang out with my friends.'

✓ 'Yes, bicycles are popular in my country because a lot of people use them on weekends. I use my bicycle every weekend to exercise and to hang out with my friends.'

'It's popular on my country' has multiple problems: incorrect article/preposition and subject form. Use plural 'bicycles are popular in my country' to match general statement. 'On my country' should be 'in my country' (preposition error). 'A lot of people using the bicycle when weekends' is ungrammatical: missing auxiliary for present simple and wrong noun phrase; use 'a lot of people use them on weekends.' Also remove repeated word 'like'. Split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestions: use present simple 'use' for habitual actions, plural 'bicycles' or 'cycling', correct preposition 'in', and use pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'bicycles'.'}]}