Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix tense errors and remove redundancy.

例: Yes, I did. I owned a bike when I was a child, but I rarely rode it because I was afraid of falling. As a result, I eventually gave it to a friend who used it more often.

提案: Organize the response with a clear topic sentence and concise supporting details. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and more precise vocabulary. Remove filler sounds and correct grammar (plural/singular, word order). Provide a brief reason and an example.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. You can see them on city streets and bike lanes, especially for short trips, because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many people cycle to the market or to work when traffic is heavy.

× Yes for sure. I have a bike but I didn't ride a bike I so I give it away to my friends.

✓ Yes, for sure. I had a bike, but I didn't know how to ride it, so I gave it away to my friends.

The response mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. The question asks about childhood (past), so use past tense 'had' not 'have' (Present tense issue ID 6). Also 'didn't ride a bike I' is ungrammatical and likely intended 'didn't know how to ride it' which needs past tense. 'Give' should be past 'gave' to match past context. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past when talking about past events and use clear phrasing like 'didn't know how to ride it' instead of fragmented structure.

× Yeah, it's very popular. You can see bikes everywhere in your city road and when you walk on the road, uh, the bikes are everywhere.

✓ Yes, they are very popular. You can see bikes everywhere on the city roads, and when you walk along the road the bikes are everywhere.

Mix of singular/plural and preposition issues with tense context. The subject 'bikes' is plural so use 'they are' rather than 'it's' (Present tense issue ID 6 and also subject-verb agreement). Use plural 'roads' for general statement and correct prepositions: 'on the city roads' and 'walk along the road'. Suggestion: match subject and verb number and choose appropriate prepositions for location ('on' and 'along').

× So that's what I think everyone will write by ride a bike for the short distance because it's very convenient.

✓ So I think everyone will ride a bike for short distances because it's very convenient.

The original contains an incorrect phrase 'will write by ride a bike' and wrong noun forms. Remove 'write by' which is incorrect and use 'ride' after 'will' for future intention. Change 'the short distance' to plural 'short distances' for generalization. This is an incorrect use of verb forms and sentence structure (Verb + -ing form issue ID 8 and sentence structure ID 26). Suggestion: simplify to 'I think everyone will ride a bike for short distances' and keep modal/future 'will' followed by base verb.