Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve natural phrasing and tighten structure. Begin with a direct topic sentence, avoid repeating "had", and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Also correct minor grammatical phrasing ("Yes, I did" or "Yes, I had one"). Keep to no more than 3–4 brief sentences.

例: Yes, I did — my father bought me the most expensive bike he could afford. As a result, I took great care of it and loved riding around the neighborhood with friends on weekends.

提案: Remove filler words, start with a clear topic sentence, and use a linking word to present contrast and support. Provide a specific example or brief statistic if possible. Avoid awkward verbs like "obtain" — use "own" or "have".

例: Not really — bikes aren't very popular in Russia because we lack dedicated cycle lanes. However, many people still own bicycles and often go cycling with friends on weekends, especially in parks or suburbs.

× Yes, I had.

✓ Yes, I did.

The examiner asked a yes/no question in the past ('Did you have a bike...'), so the appropriate short answer uses the auxiliary did rather than repeating the main verb 'have' in its past form. Using 'I had' is not idiomatic for a direct response to a did-question. Suggestion: answer 'Yes, I did' or 'No, I didn't.'

× I had the most expensive bike that my dad could afford, so I really liked to ride the bike with my friends.

✓ I had the most expensive bike that my dad could afford, so I really liked riding the bike with my friends.

The main issue is verb form after 'liked.' After verbs of preference such as 'like,' follow-up actions are commonly expressed with the -ing form when describing general enjoyment (liked riding). Using 'to ride' is not strictly wrong but changes nuance; here 'liked riding' is more natural. Also, repeating 'the bike' is acceptable but you can drop the second article ('ride the bike' vs 'ride my bike') for clarity. Suggestion: use 'liked riding my bike with my friends.'

× Uh, they are not very popular in Russia because we don't have appropriate bike roads, but a lot of people still obtain them and cycle on the weekend with their friends.

✓ Uh, they are not very popular in Russia because we don't have suitable bike lanes, but many people still buy them and cycle on weekends with their friends.

Multiple improvements: 'appropriate bike roads' is awkward; 'bike lanes' or 'cycling infrastructure' is the correct collocation (preposition/word choice issue => listed under present tense issue here because overall sentence is present). 'A lot of people' is grammatically acceptable but 'many people' is more natural. 'Obtain' is formal and odd in this context; 'buy' fits everyday speech. 'On the weekend' in general statements should be 'on weekends.' Also maintain present simple tense for habitual actions. Suggestion: use 'we don't have suitable bike lanes' and 'many people still buy them and cycle on weekends.'