Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your response did not answer the examiner's question. Instead of repeating the question, give a clear direct answer (yes/no) and then add 1–2 supporting details. Keep your answer natural and concise, avoid repetition, and use linking words if you add more than one point.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle that my parents bought me when I was seven, and I rode it to visit friends on weekends. Because it had training wheels at first, I learned to balance gradually and felt very proud when I could ride without them.

提案: Your answer is unclear and disorganized. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason). Use linking words (for example, because, therefore, moreover) and give specific reasons or an example. Keep sentences short (max 3–4) and use appropriate vocabulary (e.g., affordable, students, commuting, school).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable way for students to commute to school. For example, many parents buy simple bicycles for primary and secondary pupils, and local colleges also encourage cycling to reduce transport costs. As a result, you can see many students riding bikes on weekdays.

× Yeah, I think bikes are more popular in my country just because money of college going sponsor primary school when students are usually being attracted to the bikes may because of that power or like school to have a bike or maybe so many reasons.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are popular in my country for several reasons: parents or colleges may provide money for children to buy bikes, schools sometimes encourage students to have bikes, and there are many other reasons.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure errors (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Clauses are run together without clear connections, word order is confused, and inappropriate forms are used (e.g., 'money of college going sponsor primary school' is ungrammatical). To improve, break the idea into clear parts, use proper noun phrases ('parents or colleges provide money' rather than 'money of college going sponsor'), and connect reasons with conjunctions or punctuation. Keep verb forms simple and consistent to match the present-tense context (general statement).

× I don't know why, but it's yeah, it's proper in my country.

✓ I don't know why, but yes, it's common in my country.

This sentence shows incorrect or awkward word choice and adverb/adjective misuse (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). 'Proper' is not the right adjective for describing something common or popular, and the filler 'yeah, it's' is repetitive. Use 'common' or 'popular' to match the intended meaning, and simplify the response to avoid redundancy.