Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar, and follow the Basic Structure: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with appropriate linking words. Avoid repetition and fix verb tense and article errors (e.g., 'when I was young', 'teach me to ride a bike', 'I am afraid to ride'). Also reduce hesitation words (e.g., 'hmm') and limit answer to up to 5 sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents were both very busy, so they never had time to teach me to ride, which is why I never learned. As a result, I still feel nervous about balancing on a bicycle, so I avoid riding even now.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and give two specific reasons using linking words. Correct repetition and filler words, use more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'public transport' instead of 'other transportations') and provide one brief example or contrast. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: No, bicycles are not very popular in my country. Most people prefer public transport like buses or motorbikes because cities are crowded and cycling infrastructure is poor. For example, I rarely see bike lanes in my city, although three-wheeled vehicles such as tricycles are common in some areas.

× No, I never had a bike in my life.

✓ No, I never had a bike when I was a child.

The original sentence 'in my life' is not wrong grammatically but is less natural in this context; the question asks about childhood, so use a past-time phrase 'when I was a child' to match the context and past tense. Suggestion: Use time expressions that match the question (e.g., 'when I was a child') to make the meaning clear.

× Hmm, I think my parents both were busy to teach me how to bike when I were when I was young.

✓ Hmm, I think both my parents were too busy to teach me how to ride a bike when I was young.

Errors: 'parents both' word order is awkward; 'were busy to teach' is incorrect collocation (use 'too busy to' + infinitive); 'bike' as a verb is acceptable but 'ride a bike' is more natural; 'when I were' is wrong subject-verb agreement—use 'was' for first-person singular past. Suggestion: Use 'both my parents', 'were too busy to', and 'when I was young'.

× So I never learned to bike and until now I'm so afraid when I try to bike like I use my balance.

✓ So I never learned to ride a bike, and even now I'm too afraid to try because I can't keep my balance.

Errors: 'learned to bike and until now' has tense/structure problems—use commas and conjunctions correctly; 'afraid when I try to bike like I use my balance' is ungrammatical. Use 'afraid to try' + reason; 'use my balance' should be 'keep my balance' or 'maintain my balance'. Suggestion: Say 'afraid to try because I can't keep my balance' for clarity and correct verb forms.

× So yeah, I never bike.

✓ So yeah, I never rode a bike.

Error: 'never bike' mixes present simple with a past context. The question refers to childhood and past experience, so use past tense 'never rode' or present perfect 'have never ridden'. Suggestion: Use 'never rode a bike' or 'have never ridden a bike' depending on emphasis.

× I never had a bike and I don't even know how to bike until now.

✓ I never had a bike, and I still don't know how to ride one.

Errors: 'don't even know how to bike until now' incorrectly mixes present simple with 'until now'. Use 'still don't know' to express a continuing state, and 'ride one' is more natural than 'bike' as a verb here. Suggestion: Use 'still don't know how to ride a bike' to indicate continued inability.

× No, bikes are No, bikes are not popular in my country.

✓ No, bikes are not popular in my country.

Error: Repetition and disfluent 'No, bikes are No, bikes are'. Remove duplication to make a grammatical and fluent sentence. Suggestion: Say the sentence once clearly.

× We don't have this culture there.

✓ We don't have that culture here.

Error: 'there' conflicts with speaker perspective; use 'here' when speaking about one's own country. Also 'this culture' is less natural than 'that culture' in this context. Suggestion: Use 'that culture here' or simply 'that culture'.

× People rarely bike Uh, we use buses, other transportations, but we don't bike.

✓ People rarely ride bikes. We use buses and other forms of public transport, but we don't cycle much.

Errors: Repetition and 'transportations' is uncountable/unclear—use 'forms of transport' or 'public transport'. 'Bike' as a verb is colloquial; 'ride' or 'cycle' are better. Suggestion: Use 'ride bikes' or 'cycle' and 'public transport' for natural phrasing.

× So maybe this is one of the reasons that I cannot bike Yeah.

✓ So maybe this is one of the reasons I cannot ride a bike.

Errors: 'reasons that I cannot bike Yeah' includes filler 'Yeah' and awkward clause 'reasons that I cannot bike'. Use 'one of the reasons I cannot ride a bike' for correct relative clause structure. Suggestion: Remove fillers and use 'ride a bike'.

× But of course we have like the tricycles like I saw.

✓ But of course we have tricycles, which I have seen.

Errors: Redundant 'like' and incorrect placement; 'the tricycles like I saw' is ungrammatical. Use a relative clause 'which I have seen' or 'that I've seen' to add the observation. Suggestion: Say 'we have tricycles, which I've seen' or 'we even have tricycles'.