Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer addresses the question and gives a reason, but it is disfluent and contains repetition, incorrect word forms, and some awkward phrasing. To improve: (1) Remove filled pauses (“uh”, “umm”) and repeated words; (2) Start with a clear topic sentence; (3) Use correct and natural collocations (e.g., “get there faster” not “quicklier”); (4) Keep the answer concise (no more than 4–5 sentences) and add one or two specific details if needed. Also check grammar: use infinitives correctly (“so my parents bought me one to ride to school”) and avoid extra words at the end.

例: Yes. I had a bicycle as a child because both my primary and secondary schools were far from home. My parents bought it so I could ride to school every day and save time. I remember using it to get to class quickly, especially during rush hour.

提案: Your answer gives a general idea but is unclear due to hesitations, grammar errors, and vague phrasing. To improve: (1) Remove hesitations and repeat words; (2) Begin with a clear opinion sentence (“Yes, I think bikes are quite popular.”); (3) Provide a specific reason and an example using correct grammar and linking words (e.g., “because”, “for example”); (4) Use accurate noun–verb agreement and phrasing (“in mountainous areas”, “children whose parents don’t own cars”). Keep it concise and coherent.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and useful in rural or mountainous areas. For example, many children whose parents don’t own cars or motorbikes ride bikes to school every day. In cities people also use bikes for short trips and commuting.

× Well honestly uh, yes, as my primary school and secondary school were quite far away from my house so my parents bought me one to go to school daily so so that I could go there faster and quicklier and can get make it to.

✓ Well, honestly, yes. My primary and secondary schools were quite far from my house, so my parents bought me a bike to ride to school every day so that I could get there more quickly and reliably.

This sentence has multiple sentence structure problems (Grammar problem type ID 26) and subject-verb agreement issues (27) and incorrect adverb usage (13). It is a run-on with repeated fillers and unclear verb forms: 'primary school and secondary school' is better as 'primary and secondary schools' (plural/singular consistency), 'to go to school daily' is acceptable but 'to ride to school every day' is clearer, 'so so that' is redundant, 'faster and quicklier' is incorrect because 'quicklier' is nonstandard; use 'more quickly' or 'faster'. 'can get make it to' is ungrammatical; use 'could get there'. Suggestion: break into shorter sentences, remove fillers (uh, um), use correct plural noun form, and use standard comparative/adverb form 'more quickly' or 'faster'.

× Umm, definitely yes umm, especially for those umm mountainous area where where children's their parents don't have vehicles and like cars and motorbikes to drive them to school so they usually using bikes to travel and adapt you buy.

✓ Umm, definitely yes. Bikes are especially common in mountainous areas where many children's parents don't have vehicles like cars or motorbikes to drive them to school, so they usually use bikes to travel.

This sentence contains sentence structure errors (26), incorrect use of pronouns (12), incorrect use of prepositions/articles (11 and 22), and incorrect verb forms (6/8). Problems include 'mountainous area' which should be plural 'mountainous areas' when speaking generally, the phrase 'children's their parents' is ungrammatical — use 'children's parents' or better 'many children's parents', 'don't have vehicles and like cars and motorbikes' should be 'don't have vehicles such as cars or motorbikes', and 'so they usually using bikes' uses an incorrect verb form; use 'they usually use bikes'. Remove filler words and repetitive 'where where' and 'adapt you buy' which is meaningless. Suggestion: simplify the structure, use correct plural nouns, correct pronoun placement, and proper verb forms.