Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct and grammatically correct, but it is very short and could be improved by adding one or two specific supporting details. Keep it natural and concise (no more than 3–4 sentences). Use a topic sentence followed by a brief detail or memory to make the answer more engaging.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle with training wheels that my parents bought me when I was six. I remember practicing in the park every weekend until I learned to ride without the wheels.

提案: Your answer communicates the main idea but is repetitive and has grammar issues (subject-verb agreement, repetition). Make a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific reasons with linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example', 'in addition'). Keep sentences concise and correct subject-verb agreement (bikes are, people use).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for exercise and short trips. For example, children ride bikes to school and adults often cycle with friends on weekends, which makes cycling both practical and social.

× for me it is popular because many kids, many individuals kids, not just kids but also adults, uses this bike for healthy living, riding and to enjoy enjoy riding with friends.

✓ For me, bikes are popular because many children and other people, not just kids but also adults, use them for healthy living, for riding, and to enjoy riding with friends.

The sentence contains plural/singular mismatches and unclear noun forms. 'Many kids' and 'many individuals kids' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'many children and other people' or 'many children and adults'. The verb 'uses' is singular but the subject is plural, so it should be 'use' (subject-verb agreement; ID 27 relates). Pronouns must agree in number: replace 'this bike' with 'them' or 'bikes' when referring to bikes in general. Remove repeated word 'enjoy'. Also add commas and 'for' to parallel items. Suggestion: simplify the noun phrase and ensure plural subjects take plural verbs, avoid repetition, and keep parallel structure.