Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally natural and gives relevant details, but it has some grammatical errors, redundancy and slightly awkward phrasing. To improve: 1) Begin with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question (e.g., “Yes, I did.”). 2) Use correct articles and plural forms (“most of the children” → “most children” or “most of the children”) and avoid repeating verbs (“try to drive that, try to ride that” → “try to ride it”). 3) Keep the response concise (maximum 4–5 sentences) and add one specific detail or memory to enrich the answer. 4) Use linking words for flow (for example: “It was…” followed by “However,” or “Because”).

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bike with flame stickers that I loved. It was a little too big for me at the time, but my father encouraged me to learn to ride it, so I practiced most afternoons until I felt confident. I remember feeling proud when I could ride down the street without wobbling.

提案: Your answer conveys the main idea but is short and can be improved with clearer structure, a linking word, and specific reasons or examples. To improve: 1) Start with a direct topic sentence (“No, they aren’t very popular here.”). 2) Add a reason or brief example to support your statement (e.g., road safety, public transport, culture). 3) Use linking words like “because” or “mainly” to connect ideas. 4) Avoid awkward placement of comparative clauses—place “here” earlier: “Here, bikes aren’t as popular as in Europe.”

例: No, bikes aren’t very popular here. Unlike many European cities, most people prefer cars or public transport because roads can be unsafe for cyclists and cycling infrastructure is limited. As a result, you rarely see commuters riding bikes in my city except on weekends.

× Just like most of children in my neighborhood.

✓ Just like most of the children in my neighborhood.

The phrase 'most of children' is missing the definite article 'the' before the plural noun 'children'. When referring to a specific group (children in my neighborhood), use 'the' + plural noun: 'most of the children'. Suggestion: include 'the' before 'children' in similar contexts.

× my father somehow encouraged me to try to drive that, try to ride that.

✓ my father somehow encouraged me to try to ride it.

Using both 'drive' and 'ride' is redundant for a bicycle; 'ride' is the correct verb. Also 'that' is awkward when referring to the bike; 'it' is the natural pronoun. The present participle issue arises from 'try to drive that, try to ride that' — repetition and wrong verb choice. Suggestion: use a single correct verb ('ride') and the pronoun 'it'. Note: This also improves sentence flow and conciseness.

× Unfortunately, bikes are not as popular as they are in Europe here, so now I wouldn't say that they're popular here.

✓ Unfortunately, bikes are not as popular here as they are in Europe, so I wouldn't say they're popular.

Word order and placement of 'here' and 'now' are awkward. Place 'here' close to the verb phrase it modifies: 'not as popular here as they are in Europe'. Removing redundant 'here' at the end and unnecessary 'now' makes the sentence clearer and matches the present general statement. Suggestion: place comparative phrase 'as ... as' correctly and avoid repeating location adverbs.