Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, accuracy, and coherence. Use past tense consistently, avoid short fragmented sentences, and provide one clear supporting detail. Combine ideas into 2–3 coherent sentences and use a linking word if adding explanation.

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was about 15 years old because my parents bought it for my birthday, and I remember being very excited. It was a simple mountain bike, which I used to ride around my neighborhood every weekend.

提案: Focus on sentence accuracy and cohesion. Correct subject-verb agreement, remove repetition, and use linking words to group reasons. Add a specific example or brief statistic to strengthen your answer.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short city trips. For example, many commuters cycle to work to avoid traffic and save on fuel costs, and recently several cities have added dedicated bike lanes, which has encouraged more people to ride.

× I get my first bike when I was about 15 years old.

✓ I got my first bike when I was about 15 years old.

The speaker is describing a past event, so the past tense of 'get' (got) must be used instead of the present tense 'get'. Use simple past for completed actions at a specific time in the past. Suggestion: practice forming and using regular and irregular past tense verbs in narratives.

× My parents rode it for me as a birthday. Birthday gift.

✓ My parents bought it for me as a birthday gift.

The phrase 'rode it for me' is incorrect: 'rode' refers to using a bike, not obtaining it. The correct verb is 'bought' or 'gave'. Also 'as a birthday. Birthday gift.' is fragmented and repetitive. Combine into 'as a birthday gift.' Suggestion: choose verbs that match the intended meaning (buy/give) and avoid sentence fragments; check collocations such as 'birthday gift'.

× Yes, I think bike are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips in the city.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips in the city.

The noun 'bike' is singular while the verb form 'are' requires a plural subject. Use the plural noun 'bikes' to agree with 'are' when speaking about bikes in general. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb number match; when referring to a whole category, use the plural noun.

× Many people prefer cycling to avoid the traffic and to save money on on fuel and some cities have been improving bike lanes which encourage more riders.

✓ Many people prefer cycling to avoid traffic and to save money on fuel, and some cities have been improving bike lanes, which encourages more riders.

Several issues: 'the traffic' is better as 'traffic' in general; 'on on fuel' has a duplicated preposition and should be 'on fuel'; the clause 'which encourage more riders' refers to 'bike lanes' (singular/plural agreement with relative verb) — since 'bike lanes' is plural, 'encourage' would match, but when the preceding clause is seen as a singular initiative, 'which encourages' is more natural; also run-on sentence lacks commas. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles, fix duplicated words, add commas to separate clauses, and ensure verb agrees with intended noun.