Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Sửa ngữ pháp căn bản (thì và chia động từ), dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn. Nên dùng tối đa 4–5 câu, tránh lặp từ và từ thừa. Ví dụ: mở đầu bằng câu xác nhận (“Yes, I did.”), tiếp theo nêu nguồn gốc (một câu), mô tả kỷ niệm hoặc cảm xúc (một câu) và kết bằng chi tiết cụ thể (một câu).

例: Yes, I did. I received a small blue bicycle from my grandfather when I was about seven, and he taught me how to ride it in the park. I remember being nervous at first, but after a few tries I could balance and pedal on my own. That bike gave me a lot of confidence and many happy memories.

提案: Giảm tiếng ừ ừ và ngập ngừng, cải thiện từ vựng và cấu trúc câu để trả lời trực tiếp. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (“I don't think bikes are very popular.”), rồi giải thích lý do với hai lý do cụ thể và nếu có thể nêu so sánh hoặc dẫn chứng ngắn. Giữ 3–4 câu, dùng liên từ như “because” hoặc “however” để mạch lạc.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country these days because many people prefer buses or private cars for convenience. In cities, public transport is affordable and convenient, so fewer pupils and commuters choose bicycles. However, cycling is becoming more common in some areas because of new bike lanes and eco-friendly campaigns.

× To be honest, I have a bike when I were child, my bike is for is a gift from my grandfather and my grandfather torched me. How to ride this bike?

✓ To be honest, I had a bike when I was a child. My bike was a gift from my grandfather, and my grandfather taught me how to ride it.

The sentence contains multiple tense and agreement errors. 'have' should be past 'had' because the question asks about childhood (past). 'were child' is wrong: use singular subject with past 'was a child'. 'is for is a gift' is ungrammatical; use past 'was a gift'. 'torched' is incorrect verb choice and form; 'taught' (past of teach) is correct. 'How to ride this bike?' should be integrated as a clause 'taught me how to ride it.' Suggestion: Identify timeline (past) and use past tense consistently; choose correct verbs ('teach' -> 'taught') and correct subject-verb forms ('I was'). Grammar problem type ID:5

× Umm, I don't think so because uh, now umm, pupil usually umm, used a bus or car on umm, smart car, smart bike, umm umm, it is so less pupil uh, using bite.

✓ Umm, I don't think so because now pupils usually use buses or cars, or smart cars and smart bikes. Very few pupils use bikes.

Several issues: 'pupil usually used' mixes present time with past form; use present 'pupils usually use'. Plural forms needed: 'pupil' -> 'pupils', 'bus' -> 'buses', 'car' -> 'cars'. 'it is so less pupil' is incorrect English; express quantity as 'very few pupils'. 'using bite' has wrong word 'bite' instead of 'bike' and wrong verb form; use 'use bikes'. Suggestion: Use correct plural nouns for general statements, use present simple for habitual actions, and choose correct vocabulary ('bike'). Grammar problem type ID:1