Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and less emotional; give a concise direct answer, then add a brief reason with neutral wording and one supporting detail. Avoid overly negative language like "so poor" which can sound blunt. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: No, I didn't. My family couldn't afford a bike when I was a child, so I usually walked to school. Sometimes I borrowed a neighbor's bike for short trips, but I mainly relied on walking.

提案: Make the sentence grammatically correct and clearer: start with a topic sentence stating your opinion, then add specific supporting details using linking words (for example, "for instance", "because"). Mention who uses bikes and in what situations. Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country. For instance, many students and commuters use bicycles for short trips to school or work because they are inexpensive and convenient for nearby destinations.

× No, I didn't. My parents were so poor that they could not afford a bike for me.

✓ No, I didn't. My parents were so poor that they could not afford a bike for me.

Although the sentence is grammatically acceptable, it uses 'could not' as the past ability/possibility form which matches the past context ('Did you have... when you were a child?'). No correction is required. Keep past simple 'didn't' and 'could not' to indicate inability in the past. Suggestion: none needed.

× Bikes are popular in my country that for those who can afford it, it is a common means of transport for students go to school close by.

✓ Bikes are popular in my country; for those who can afford them, they are a common means of transport for students who go to nearby schools.

This sentence has multiple structure issues: an incorrect use of 'that' to link clauses and wrong agreement/pronoun references. Problems include: 1) 'that' is unnecessary and disrupts the clause connection, so replace with a semicolon or connecting phrase. 2) 'it' should refer to plural 'bikes', so use 'them'. 3) 'it is a common means' should be plural 'they are a common means' to agree with 'bikes'. 4) 'students go to school close by' needs relative clause and adjective order: use 'students who go to nearby schools.' Suggestions: split ideas clearly, ensure pronoun number matches the noun (bikes -> them/they), use a relative clause 'who go to nearby schools' and place adjectives before nouns ('nearby schools').