Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy, tense consistency and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid short fragments and repetitions.

例: Yes, I did. My father gifted me a bike when I was about eight, and I used it to ride to school every day. Because it was light and reliable, it became my main way of getting around during childhood.

提案: Clarify your idea and use correct vocabulary and linking words. Begin with a direct opinion sentence, then explain with specific reasons or examples. Avoid unclear phrases like "car bubble" and finish the sentence fully.

例: Yes, I think bikes are still quite popular. For example, many people prefer bicycles for short trips to the market because they are cheaper and easier to park, and this is especially common in crowded urban areas.

× Yes, when I was a kid. I have a bike, it was gifted by my father and I go to school with it.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid I had a bike. It was gifted to me by my father and I went to school on it.

This sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. The question asks about childhood (past), so verbs should be past: 'have' -> 'had', 'go' -> 'went'. Also use 'gifted to me' to show passive action with correct preposition, and 'on it' is the correct preposition for riding a bike. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (past) when talking about past experiences; use 'gifted to me' or 'was given to me' and 'go to school on it.'

× Yes, I think by car bubble in my country mostly people prefer bike when they go to market for their for shopping their goods and.

✓ Yes, I think because of the car boom in my country, most people prefer bikes when they go to the market to buy their goods.

Multiple issues: 'by car bubble' is incorrect phrase; use 'because of the car boom' or 'increase in car ownership.' 'mostly people' should be 'most people' (quantifier). 'prefer bike' needs article 'bikes' (plural) or 'a bike'; here plural 'bikes' fits. 'go to market' requires 'go to the market' and purpose 'to buy their goods' instead of 'for shopping their goods and'. Also remove trailing 'and.' Suggestion: use clear causal phrase ('because of'), correct quantifier ('most'), plural for general preference ('bikes'), and 'to buy' for purpose of going shopping.