Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your response simply repeated the examiner's question instead of answering. To improve, answer directly with a clear topic sentence (yes/no + brief detail), then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Keep it natural and limit to up to five sentences. For example, say whether you had a bike, who it belonged to or how often you used it, and give a specific memory or reason.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle that my parents bought for my seventh birthday, and I rode it to school most days. However, I didn’t ride long distances because I lived in a hilly area, so I usually cycled around the neighborhood with my friends.

提案: Your answer attempts to respond but has several grammar and clarity issues and lacks coherence. Improve by starting with a clear opinion, then support it with specific, well-connected details using linking words (for example, because, also, for instance). Use correct verb forms and pluralization, and give one concrete example or statistic. Keep it concise (1–4 sentences).

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for commuting and exercise. For instance, there is an annual bike race organized in my city where the winner receives a cash prize, which helps promote cycling and attracts thousands of participants.

× Yes, I think bike are popular in my country in pastor every year they make rise of bike and they give one million for the winner.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country. Every year there is a bike race in the countryside, and they give one million to the winner.

Multiple issues: 'bike are' shows subject-verb agreement and plural form error (use plural 'bikes' with 'are') -> Grammar Problem Type ID 27 and 1; run-on sentence and awkward expressions require sentence splitting and clearer vocabulary. 'in pastor' is incorrect preposition/word choice; likely meant 'in the countryside' or 'in the past or rural area' -> Incorrect use of prepositions/word choice (ID 11). 'make rise of bike' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'there is a bike race' to match intended meaning and correct 'there be' structure (ID 3). 'they give one million for the winner' uses wrong preposition; use 'to the winner'. Suggestions: use plural nouns when referring to general category (bikes), ensure subject and verb agree, split long run-on sentences into shorter sentences, use correct prepositions ('in the countryside', 'to the winner'), and use natural collocations like 'bike race' and 'give [amount] to the winner'.