Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce filler words (uh, umm) and correct tense/grammar (e.g., "the last time I practiced"). Aim for 2–4 sentences total.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father taught me to ride it, and I practiced cycling regularly; in fact, I rode a bike about a month ago when I went to the park.

提案: Give a clear opinion then support it with specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, because, however) and avoid repeats and fillers. Correct phrasing: "the most popular modes of transport are cars and trains." Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: No, bikes are not very popular in my country. For example, most people prefer cars and trains because they are faster and more convenient for commuting, especially in large cities.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Using 'did have' is unnecessary for a simple past statement and sounds like emphasis; the simple past 'had' is the correct form for stating a past fact. Use 'I had' for natural, grammatically correct past tense.

× Uh, my father trained me how to ride a bike, uh, when I was a child.

✓ My father taught me how to ride a bike when I was a child.

'Trained me how to' is awkward here; 'teach' is the appropriate verb for showing someone how to do a skill in the past. Use the simple past 'taught' for a completed action in the past.

× And since then I've been uh, practicing, uh, cycling, umm,

✓ And since then I've been practicing cycling.

The phrase 'I've been practicing cycling' correctly uses the present perfect continuous to show an action that started in the past and continues. Remove extra fillers and commas. 'Practicing cycling' is the correct verb + -ing form; redundant comma after 'practicing' is unnecessary.

× And the last time I practice uh, one month ago.

✓ And the last time I practiced was one month ago.

The sentence refers to a specific completed past event, so use the simple past 'practiced' and include the copula 'was' to form a complete clause: 'The last time I practiced was one month ago.' Also remove fillers for clarity.

× Unfortunately, bikes are not popular in our country.

✓ Unfortunately, bikes are not very popular in our country.

The original is grammatically acceptable, but adding 'very' makes the statement more natural and conveys degree. The present simple 'are' correctly describes a general present situation.

× Umm, I think the most popular uh uh, transportation method is uh, cars and as well as umm uh, uh, train.

✓ I think the most popular methods of transportation are cars and trains.

Original has redundancy and incorrect singular/plural agreement. 'Most popular transportation method is cars and ... train' mixes singular 'method' with plural items. Change to plural 'methods' and plural verb 'are'; use parallel nouns 'cars and trains' and remove fillers for clarity.