Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify and simplify your response. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two concise reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid unrelated words and hesitations. For example, say you didn’t have a bike, then give a specific reason (safety, cost, or family choice), and finish with a short detail or consequence.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents thought it was dangerous. For example, there were few safe places to ride near our home, so they preferred I play in supervised areas instead.

提案: Give a direct answer and then support it with specific, coherent details and a linking word. Avoid mixing unrelated words; use correct nouns and plural forms. Mention who uses bikes, why they are popular (cheap, convenient, healthy), and a clear example or comparison.

例: Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country, especially among students and commuters, because they are inexpensive and convenient. For example, many people cycle to university or work to avoid traffic and save money on transport.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I wear a sand in a salad.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The speaker used present tense verb 'wear' incorrectly instead of past tense 'was' and incorrect words 'sand in a salad' likely meant 'a child'. Use past tense 'was' to match 'didn't have' and the time reference 'when I was a child'. Suggestion: replace the phrase with 'when I was a child' to be clear and grammatically correct.

× Uh, that people think, umm, that is a dangerous for a child to give in child time for a bike.

✓ People think it is dangerous to give a child a bike when they are young.

This sentence has incorrect word order and unnecessary words. 'That people think' and 'that is a dangerous' are awkward; 'dangerous' should not have 'a' before it in this structure and 'to give in child time for a bike' is ungrammatical. Correct structure is 'People think it is dangerous to give a child a bike when they are young.' Suggestion: use the cleft structure 'People think it is...' and the infinitive 'to give a child a bike' and a clear time phrase 'when they are young'.

× Yeah, I think bikes are popular in my country for ladies and jeans, girl and boys.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are popular in my country for ladies and jeans, girls and boys.

There are word choice and plural form problems. 'jeans' is likely a wrong word choice; if intended 'teens' (teenagers), use 'teens'. Also 'girl' should be plural 'girls' to match 'boys'. Suggestion: correct to 'ladies and teens, girls and boys' or better: 'for women, teens, girls, and boys.' Also verb 'are popular' is correct present tense.