Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I did), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (uh, umm) and unfinished thoughts. Keep answers within 2–4 sentences and mention a concrete example (where you rode, how often, or who with).

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike that I used almost every weekend to ride around the neighborhood with my friends. Because I enjoy outdoor exercise, cycling was my main way to stay active and explore nearby parks.

提案: Give a clear, structured opinion and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (for example, also, however) and avoid vague or repetitive phrases. Distinguish between types of bikes (regular bicycles, electric bikes, motorcycles) if relevant, and mention statistics or everyday observations for credibility.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in Japan. For example, many commuters use regular bicycles to travel short distances, and electric bikes have become common among older people because they make hills easier to climb. Also, tourists often rent bikes in cities and parks, which shows how widespread cycling is.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was younger or since I was younger, uh, for example, umm, I like uh, doing exercise outside, uh, rather than spending time in home.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was younger. For example, I liked doing exercise outside rather than spending time at home.

Mixes past and present inconsistently. The question asks about childhood (past), so verbs should be past tense. 'Since I was younger' is inappropriate here; use 'when I was younger.' 'I like doing' should be 'I liked doing' to match past time. Preposition 'in home' is incorrect; use 'at home'. Suggestions: maintain past tense for all clauses about childhood, replace 'since' with 'when', and use 'at home'.

× I'm an outdoor person and also I like uh.

✓ I was an outdoor person and I also liked riding my bike.

Fragment and incomplete idea. The student started a sentence in present tense but the context is past. 'I like uh' is unfinished. Convert to past tense and complete the thought by specifying the activity (riding my bike) to be clear. Suggestions: finish clauses and keep tense consistent with the question about childhood.

× Yes, I think it is uh, I live in Japan and uh a lot of people uh including foreigners like tourists uh like use uh bikes, uh like uh, some of them use uh the motorcycle uh like by using electronic uh like service or uh like people in.

✓ Yes, I think so. I live in Japan and a lot of people, including foreign tourists, use bikes. Some of them use motorcycles, and some use electric bike-sharing services.

Awkward phrasing and repetition; tense is present which matches question about current popularity, but the sentence is disfluent. Remove filler words, use 'so' instead of 'it is', and clarify 'motorcycle' vs 'electric bike-sharing services'. 'By using electronic like service' is incorrect; use 'electric bike-sharing services'. Also finish the sentence rather than trailing off. Suggestions: eliminate fillers, simplify structure, and use clear nouns for services.