Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and precise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid awkward phrases like "joined the time with my bike," and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add one specific detail (where you rode or a memory) and use linking words for coherence (e.g., "because", "so"). Pronunciation and grammar: use past tense consistently and use collocations like "have fun" rather than "brought me a lot of fun."

例: Yes. I had a small red bike when I was a child. I often rode it to the park to meet my friends, and we would race along the paths for fun. Because I rode every day, I became very confident and independent.

提案: Answer the question directly about bikes, not "bags." Begin with a clear opinion, then give 1–2 specific supporting points and use linking words (e.g., "for example", "especially"). Mention urban vs rural differences or reasons (cost, convenience, environment). Avoid vague phrases like "plant places" and name correct regions if needed. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are still quite popular in many parts of my country. For example, in smaller cities and rural areas people use bicycles for short journeys because they are cheap and convenient. However, in big cities like Beijing many people prefer public transport or electric bikes due to traffic.

× I used to ride my bike to meet with my friends.

✓ I used to ride my bike to meet my friends.

The verb phrase 'used to' correctly indicates a past habitual action, so tense is fine. The issue is the unnecessary preposition 'with' after 'meet' when referring to meeting people. Use 'meet someone' without 'with'. Suggestion: say 'meet my friends' to be natural.

× It brought me a lot of fun and excitement, so I joined the time with my bike.

✓ It brought me a lot of fun and excitement, so I spent that time riding my bike.

The original sentence 'I joined the time with my bike' is ungrammatical—'join time' is not a correct English structure. The intended meaning is to spend time doing an activity. Use 'spend time' + gerund to express this (spend time riding). This fixes sentence structure and verb form.

× Bags are very popular in my country, especially in the plant places just like Tianjin, Beijing, Henan province. Uh.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country, especially in places like Tianjin, Beijing, and Henan Province.

The student said 'Bags' instead of 'Bikes' (word choice error). Also 'plant places' is incorrect; likely meant 'places' or 'large cities'. Use 'places like' for examples and include commas in a list; capitalize 'Province' in proper noun 'Henan Province'. This corrects word choice and sentence structure. Suggestion: say 'places like Tianjin, Beijing, and Henan Province' or 'cities like Tianjin and Beijing and provinces such as Henan.'