Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, use correct vocabulary and grammar, and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Avoid repetition and correct word choice ("bike", not "Pike"). Use past simple for past facts and one linking word if you add a reason. For example, start with a direct answer, then briefly explain why with one clear reason and a short consequence or feeling.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn’t afford one because we had limited financial resources, so I usually walked or used public transport instead.

提案: Answer directly, use correct nouns and verb forms, and add a specific example with linking words. Replace hesitations and filler words with a clear structure: topic sentence + reason + brief example. Use plural/singular agreement and a linking word like "because" or "for example."

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in the Philippines because they are affordable and practical for short trips. For example, I often saw my classmates and neighbors’ children riding bikes to school or around the neighborhood.

× When I was a child I never had a Pike because we are poor and we are struggling financially and we and my family is not a very well rich I would say.

✓ When I was a child I never had a bike because we were poor and struggling financially, and my family was not very wealthy, I would say.

Errors: 'Pike' is a spelling error but falls under plural/singular misuse of 'bike' capitalization; more importantly the sentence mixes present tense 'are' with past context 'When I was a child'. Use past tense 'were' and 'was' for family and financial situation. 'A very well rich' is ungrammatical; use 'very wealthy'. Suggestion: Maintain past tense throughout when referring to childhood, use correct adjective 'wealthy', and simplify conjunctions to avoid repetition.

× Yes I think Pikes are popular in my country particularly Philippines because I always see my umm classmates that time and neighbor hood that their children is using some bikes and.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country, particularly in the Philippines, because I often saw my classmates and neighbors using bikes when I was younger.

Errors: Mixed tenses and incorrect prepositions. The speaker shifts between present 'I think' and then uses 'always see ... that time' which is wrong. For general popularity present tense 'are' is fine, but the supporting example refers to the past, so use past 'saw' or rephrase. 'Pikes' is incorrect plural/spelling of 'bikes'. Missing preposition 'in the Philippines'. 'Neighbor hood' should be 'neighborhood' or 'neighbors'. 'Their children is using' has subject-verb agreement error; 'children' requires 'are using'. Suggestion: Use 'bikes' spelling, include 'in' before country names, keep tense consistent (use past for past observations), and ensure subject-verb agreement with plural subjects.