Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap daha düzenli ve akıcı olmalı; gereksiz dolgu kelimeleri (uh, um) azalt ve tek bir net cümle ile başla. Ardından kısa destekleyici detay ver; örneğin paylaşma durumu ve nedenini açıkla. Bağlaçlar (because, so, however) kullanarak mantıklı akış sağla. Cümle sayısını 2-3'te tut ve tekrarları (I had, I had) kaldır.

例: Yes, I did. I had one bicycle when I was a child, but I shared it with my brother because we only had a single bike in the family. As a result, we often took turns riding it in the neighborhood.

提案: Daha açık ve doğru dilbilgisi kullan; öznenin ve fiilin uyumuna dikkat et (Everyone rides). Cevabı bir konu cümlesiyle ver, sonra birkaç spesifik neden veya örnek ekle (örneğin ulaşım, sağlık, maliyet). Bağlaçlarla (because, for example) destekle ve dolgu kelimelerini çıkar. 2-3 cümle yeterli.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to get around. For example, many people use bicycles for short trips to work or school, and there are dedicated bike lanes in several cities to encourage cycling.

× OK uh what I was trying yes uh actually I had a bike uh, but I share uh my bike with brother uh, because uh I had, I had only 1.

✓ OK, yes. Actually I had a bike, but I shared my bike with my brother because I had only one.

The sentence contains multiple structure and agreement problems. Errors include incorrect verb tense (present 'share' should be past 'shared') and missing possessive article before 'brother' ('my brother'). The phrase 'I had, I had only 1' is redundant and number should be written out as 'one'. Suggestions: use consistent past tense when describing childhood (e.g., 'I had', 'I shared'), include possessive determiners where needed ('my brother'), remove redundancies, and write numbers in words for clarity.

× Yes, actually, uh, in my country, uh are popular bikes, uh, and also umm. Everyone ride a bike.

✓ Yes, actually, bikes are popular in my country, and everyone rides a bike.

The original sentence misorders subject and verb ('in my country, uh are popular bikes' is incorrect word order) and uses incorrect verb form 'ride' for third person singular; it should be 'rides'. Also 'bikes are popular' is the natural word order. Suggestions: place the subject before the verb ('bikes are popular in my country') and use third person singular 'rides' after 'everyone'.