Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but can be improved for naturalness, grammatical accuracy and conciseness. Avoid unnecessary words (e.g., "that" after bought) and correct tense usage ("had bought" → "bought"). Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details with a linking phrase. Also try to keep to a maximum of about 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was seven, but I never learned to ride, so it spent most of the time parked in the garage. I remember feeling a little disappointed because my friends would ride around the neighborhood without me.

提案: Your response gives good reasons but could be more focused on your country (the question asks about your country) and more concise. Use linking words to structure reasons (for example, 'Firstly', 'Secondly', 'Finally'). Replace awkward phrases like 'in overall the world' with 'in many countries' or 'in my country'. Vary vocabulary (e.g., 'inexpensive', 'environmentally friendly') and avoid repeating words (e.g., 'they' many times).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Firstly, they are inexpensive and easy to use, so many people choose them for short trips. Secondly, they are environmentally friendly because they don’t produce exhaust emissions, which is important in crowded cities.

× My parents had bought that for me when I was 7, but I never learned how to ride it so it was usually parked in the garage.

✓ My parents bought it for me when I was seven, but I never learned how to ride it, so it was usually parked in the garage.

The past perfect 'had bought' is unnecessary because the sequence of past events is clear using the simple past. Use simple past 'bought' for a completed action in the past. Also change 'that' to 'it' for natural reference and write numbers under ten as words ('seven'). Add a comma before 'so' to join the clauses properly.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in overall the world because they are cheap and they are easy to ride, they don't need license and also they don't produce any toxic gas and don't pollute the air.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular overall in the world because they are cheap and easy to ride; they don't require a license and they don't produce toxic gases or pollute the air.

The phrase 'in overall the world' is incorrect; use 'overall in the world' or simply 'overall' or 'around the world.' 'Need license' is incorrect — use 'require a license' or 'need a license' with article 'a.' 'Any toxic gas' is awkward; say 'toxic gases.' Use a semicolon or period to separate independent clauses instead of a comma splice. These changes correct preposition and article usage and improve clarity.