Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ не завершён и непоследователен. Нужно дать чёткое утверждение (topic sentence) и одно-два дополнительных предложения с конкретикой. Избегайте пауз и слов-паразитов. Используйте связки для логичности (for example, later, because). Также следите за правильной грамматикой: завершайте мысль (например: "but I stopped using it" или "and I loved riding it").

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it every day to ride around my neighbourhood, and I especially loved going to the park with my friends. Later I stopped riding it as much when I started using public transport to get to school.

提案: Ответ содержит много пауз, повторы и неясные фразы. Нужно сформулировать ясное мнение и подкрепить конкретными причинами или примерами. Используйте связки (because, for example, many people) и точную лексику (bicycles, scooters, popular, convenient). Уберите междометия и повторы.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bikes and electric scooters to commute to work or to run quick errands in the city.

× When I was a child I had a bike, but then after. It.

✓ When I was a child I had a bike, but then I didn't have it anymore.

The original sentence fragments and punctuation make the meaning unclear. The speaker intends to say they owned a bike in childhood but later did not. Use the simple past for both actions and a negative to show loss: 'had' and 'didn't have'. Include a subject for the second clause ('I') and 'anymore' to indicate cessation. Also remove the isolated 'It.' which is incomplete.

× Yes, I think uh right, because uh scooter uh, a lot of make and uh use use, sorry, a lot of people uh, use bike and scooter.

✓ Yes, I think so. Scooters and bikes are very common because many people use them.

The original sentence is disfluent and has poor word order. Restore a clear sentence structure: a short response 'Yes, I think so.' followed by a reason clause. Use plural nouns 'scooters and bikes' and the passive-adjacent adjective 'are very common' or active 'many people use them'. Remove filler words and repeated words. Ensure subject-verb agreement ('many people use') and correct noun forms.