Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Good direct response and clear supporting detail. Improve naturalness by tightening phrasing, removing filler and slightly varying vocabulary. Keep answers to no more than five sentences; add a linking word to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small green bicycle when I was about eleven, and I used to ride it with my friends every afternoon around the neighbourhood. Because we loved exploring, we often cycled to the park or to each other’s houses.

提案: Answer the question more directly and avoid hesitations and grammar errors. Use a clear topic sentence, then one or two supporting details with linking words and specific examples. For instance, say why bikes are popular and who uses them.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, many children use bikes to get to school or to meet friends, and adults often cycle in parks or on weekend errands because it is cheap and healthy.

× Yes, uh yes it popular.

✓ Yes, uh yes it is popular.

The verb 'be' must agree with the third person singular subject 'it.' The sentence omitted the auxiliary 'is.' Use 'it is' to form a correct present simple statement. Suggestion: Always include the correct present form of 'be' (am/is/are) after subjects like 'it.'

× Yes it is popular in my country especially umm during uh childhood and to gather each other children.

✓ Yes, it is popular in my country, especially during childhood, when children gather together.

This sentence has multiple structure problems: incorrect phrase order ('to gather each other children'), awkward time expression, and missing commas. Rephrase to 'during childhood' and use a relative clause 'when children gather together' to show the context. Also place commas to separate the clause. Suggestion: Use natural collocations ('during childhood', 'children gather together') and simple clause linking (when + subject + verb).