Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.”), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and articles, avoid repetition, and give concrete examples (where you rode it, who you rode with, or simple related activities). Keep to no more than five sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it with my parents around our neighborhood, especially on weekends. It was useful for small errands like visiting a nearby market and sometimes helping with light household tasks. Riding my bike helped me feel independent and active.

提案: Answer directly then support with clear, specific reasons using linking words. Use correct grammar (e.g., “are popular” not “current board popular”) and clearer vocabulary (e.g., “inexpensive,” “two-wheelers,” “save space”). Limit to 1–3 supporting sentences and use connectors like “because,” “for example,” or “also.”

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and easy to maintain. For example, many families prefer two-wheelers to avoid traffic and because they take up less parking space. Also, bikes are practical for short trips and daily commuting.

× Yes, I have a bike when I am child because there is my own bike and I like to ride bike also with my parents, with my family and do some work, normally work like do some, do kitchen works etcetera.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because it was my own bike. I liked to ride it with my parents and family, and help with some work, like kitchen chores.

The sentence describes a past situation, so present-tense verbs (have, am, like) are incorrect. Change to past tense (had, was, liked) to match the time frame. Also use appropriate pronouns and articles: 'a child' requires 'a', 'my own bike' can be 'it was my own bike', and use 'ride it' to refer to the bike. 'Do some work' is vague; 'help with some work' or 'kitchen chores' is clearer. Split run-on sentence into shorter sentences for clarity.

× Yes, of course. Why current board popular in my country because it is very convenient to buy like very reasonable price to buy this bike and there is a 2 Wheeler and reduces some space.

✓ Yes, of course. Bikes are popular in my country because they are convenient and reasonably priced. They are two-wheelers and take up less space.

The original is ungrammatical and contains unclear phrases ('current board popular', 'like very reasonable price', 'there is a 2 Wheeler and reduces some space'). Restructure the sentences to subject-verb-object order: 'Bikes are popular because...' Use plural agreement 'bikes are' and adjectives 'convenient' and 'reasonably priced'. 'Two-wheeler' should be 'two-wheelers' and use 'take up less space' instead of 'reduces some space'. This fixes sentence structure and subject-verb agreement.