Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetitions. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct minor grammar errors (e.g. "I was an only child" not "I have I was"). Keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes. I received a red bicycle on my sixth birthday from my parents. Because I was an only child, the bike gave me a way to play outside and meet other children in the neighborhood, which helped me feel less lonely.

提案: Answer directly and use clearer linking words and vocabulary. Avoid hesitations and repetitions. Give a concise reason and one specific example or consequence. Use correct phrasing like "there are not enough places" or "not enough space".

例: Not really. In my country there is not enough space or safe bike lanes, so many people prefer driving. For example, in cities heavy traffic and narrow roads make cycling impractical for commuting.

× When I was six years old, on my 6th birthday, my parents my parents decided to buy a red bicycle for me.

✓ When I was six years old, on my 6th birthday, my parents decided to buy a red bicycle for me.

The sentence repeats 'my parents' twice, which is a repetition error rather than a verb tense error. However the tense 'decided' is correct (past simple) for a past event. Remove the duplicated words to correct the sentence. Suggestion: read aloud or proofread to spot accidental duplicates.

× At that time, because I have I was an only child, so sometimes I felt lonely.

✓ At that time, because I was an only child, I sometimes felt lonely.

The speaker mixed present tense 'have' with past tense 'was.' The context is past, so use past simple 'was.' Also remove the redundant conjunction 'so' after 'because' and place the adverb 'sometimes' in a natural position. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent within the same time frame and avoid redundant words.

× Actually, no, definitely, because in my country there are no there there, there there are no enough place for riding a bicycle.

✓ Actually, no, definitely, because in my country there are not enough places for riding a bicycle.

Errors include unnecessary repeated words and incorrect word order/phrasing. Use 'there are not enough' (or 'there aren't enough') and plural 'places' to match 'enough' with countable nouns. The present simple 'are' is appropriate for a general statement. Suggestion: remove duplicates, use 'not enough' before plural noun and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× So some people prefer driving to riding a bicycle.

✓ So some people prefer driving to riding a bicycle.

This sentence is correct in tense and structure; it uses the present simple 'prefer' to express a habitual choice. No grammatical change is needed. Suggestion: keep parallel gerund forms after 'prefer' (driving, riding) which is already correct.