Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve coherence and grammar, reduce redundancy, and use more natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly add one specific supporting detail. Correct verb forms and collocations (e.g., 'go on foot' or 'walk'). Use a linking word when adding the reason.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn't afford one. Instead, I usually took public transport or walked to school, which often took about 20 minutes.

提案: Reduce hesitation sounds, use consistent terms and clearer structure. Begin with a concise topic sentence, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' and 'however'). Avoid repeating words and correct terminology (say 'two-wheelers' and 'four-wheelers').

例: Yes, two-wheelers are very popular in my country because they are cheap to run and easy to park. However, four-wheelers are becoming more common recently as incomes rise and people prefer more comfort.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn't afford it. I used a normal public transportation or I used to go by walk.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn't afford it. I used normal public transportation, or I used to walk.

Error: 'I used a normal public transportation' and 'go by walk' are incorrect collocations and verb usage for past habits. Use simple past 'used' with a noun without 'a' for uncountable/uncountable transport: 'used public transportation'. For walking, the correct expression is 'I used to walk' or 'I walked', not 'go by walk'. Suggestion: say 'I used public transportation, or I used to walk.'

× Yes, of course, uh, two Wheelers are very popular in our country because it's very convenient, uh, for transportation and uh, uh, for parking, uh, and uh, other, other, uh, travel purpose.

✓ Yes, of course, two-wheelers are very popular in our country because they are very convenient for transportation, parking, and other travel purposes.

Errors: capitalization and hyphenation ('two Wheelers' -> 'two-wheelers'), singular/plural agreement ('it's' referring to plural -> 'they are'), awkward phrase 'other, other, travel purpose' -> 'other travel purposes'. Use plural 'purposes' to match 'other'. Also remove filler interjections. Suggestion: 'two-wheelers... they are very convenient for transportation, parking, and other travel purposes.'

× But uh, right now, UH-4 Wheelers are also becoming quite common here. It's uh, both are actually convenient.

✓ But right now, four-wheelers are also becoming quite common here. Both are actually convenient.

Errors: 'UH-4 Wheelers' is incorrect formatting; use 'four-wheelers'. In the second sentence, 'It's both are actually convenient' mixes singular contraction 'it's' with plural 'both are' causing subject-verb mismatch. Correct to 'Both are actually convenient.' Suggestion: use 'four-wheelers' and say 'Both are convenient.'