Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, use correct tense and concise phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one supporting detail if needed. Avoid grammatical errors (use past tense and correct articles). Use linking words if you add details (e.g., because, so).

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike when I was about eight, and I learned to ride it with the help of my older cousin.

提案: Answer directly, correct vocabulary and grammar, and give specific reasons with linking words. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then support it with 1–2 specific reasons or examples. Use accurate words ("bikes", not "wax"; "students and commuters", not "monitor").

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many students and commuters use them to avoid traffic and save money; for example, in my city many people cycle to university every day.

× Yeah, I have it back when I was a child.

✓ Yeah, I had one when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with a past time expression 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' to match the time reference. Also replace 'it' with 'one' or 'a bike' for clarity: 'I had one' or 'I had a bike.' Suggestion: Use past simple for past events and use an appropriate noun rather than a vague pronoun.

× Is wax are popular in my country?

✓ Are bikes popular in my country?

The original sentence is ungrammatical: 'Is wax are' combines two auxiliary verbs and uses the wrong subject and noun. The examiner asked about bikes, so the correct question form is 'Are bikes popular in my country?' Use the plural subject 'bikes' with the auxiliary 'are' in present simple question form. Suggestion: Form yes/no questions in present simple with 'Are' + plural noun.

× It's usually used for student and monitor just is the means of you to avoid traffic.

✓ They are usually used by students and commuters as a way to avoid traffic.

Multiple issues: pronoun agreement and word choice. 'It's' (it is) doesn't agree with plural 'bikes'; 'student and monitor' are incorrect nouns here—likely meant 'students and commuters' or 'students and workers'; 'just is the means of you to avoid traffic' is ungrammatical and awkward. Correct to 'They are usually used by students and commuters as a way to avoid traffic.' Suggestion: Ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedent, choose accurate nouns for roles, and use natural phrasing like 'used by X as a way to Y.'