Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I did”), then give one or two specific supporting details. Reduce filler words (uh, um) and avoid repeating the same time frame. Use linking words like “so” or “because” appropriately and keep the answer within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I often rode my bike around the neighborhood with friends, especially on weekends, because there wasn’t much to do at home. Riding alone was also common when I wanted some fresh air and exercise.

提案: Answer directly then give specific, relevant details and use correct grammar and linking phrases. Avoid repetition (e.g., “bike bikes”) and small pronunciation/grammar errors (“every weekends” → “every weekend”; “people's” → “people”). Add one concrete example and a linking word like “for example” or “because” to explain why they are popular.

例: Yes, they are. For example, many people cycle every weekend in groups for exercise and socializing, and you can often see them riding along riversides because these routes are flat and scenic.

× Yes, of course I'd like to have a bike when I was a child because, uh, since, uh, when I was a child, most likely I don't have anything to do.

✓ Yes, of course I had a bike when I was a child because, when I was young, I usually didn't have anything to do.

This sentence mixes tenses and uses contractions incorrectly for past reality. The interviewer asked about the past (when you were a child), so use past simple 'had' and 'didn't have' instead of 'I'd like to have' (would like) and 'don't have' (present). Also remove redundant phrases ('since, uh, when I was a child') and use clearer time reference. Suggestion: keep consistent past-tense verbs for past events and simplify redundant words. Use past simple for factual past: 'I had' and 'I didn't have'. Replace 'most likely' with 'usually' or 'often' for habitual past actions.

× So I like to go biking sometime with my friends or sometime I'm biking alone in order for me to have some fun or some activities during the days.

✓ So I liked to go biking sometimes with my friends or sometimes I biked alone to have fun or to do activities during the day.

The sentence describes habitual actions in the past but uses present tense 'I like' and present continuous 'I'm biking'. Use past habitual forms 'I liked' or 'I used to like' and simple past 'I biked' or 'I would bike'. Also use 'sometimes' (adverb position) and 'during the day' (singular) for general time. Suggestion: maintain past tense for habits and place adverbs like 'sometimes' before or after the verb correctly.

× Yes, of course bike bikes are popular in my country.

✓ Yes, of course bikes are popular in my country.

The original repeats the noun and lacks correct plural form. Use the plural noun 'bikes' without repeating. If referring to the concept generally, no article is needed: 'Bikes are popular.' Suggestion: avoid duplication and ensure correct plural form.

× Every weekends I see many people's riding a bike together.

✓ Every weekend I see many people riding bikes together.

Errors: 'Every weekends' should be singular 'Every weekend'. 'People's' is a possessive form; use plural noun 'people'. 'Riding a bike' suggests each person has one bike; better to use plural 'riding bikes' or keep singular with 'a' if referring to each person. Suggestion: use 'Every weekend', 'many people', and match plural nouns appropriately.

× Or we can say that it's a group of people that riding a bike as an exercise and most likely we can see them riding around the umm, riversides.

✓ We can say that it's a group of people who ride bikes for exercise, and we often see them riding along the riverside.

Problems: missing verb inflection after 'that' ('that riding' should be 'who ride' or 'that ride'). 'Riversides' is unusual; use 'riverside' or 'riverbank'. 'Most likely' is awkward here, use 'often'. Also combine clauses with proper conjunction and punctuation. Suggestion: use 'who' for people, use present simple 'ride' for habitual actions, choose correct noun 'riverside' and prefer 'often' for frequency.