Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors and an irrelevant phrase (“wireless cheat”). Give a direct topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then add one or two specific supporting details (who gave it to you, how you used it, or why you didn’t have one). Keep it under 3–4 short sentences and avoid unrelated words.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn't afford one, so I usually walked or took the bus to school. I remember sometimes borrowing my neighbour's bike to ride in the park.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but repetitive and wordy. Start with a concise topic sentence claiming bikes are popular, then support it with specific reasons or examples (e.g., traffic, commuting, environmental concerns) using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Limit to 2–3 sentences and vary vocabulary (bicycles, motorcycles, scooters).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and running errands. For example, in cities you can see thousands of bicycles and scooters parked near markets and metro stations.

× I can't remember but I know I don't have a bike when wireless cheat.

✓ I can't remember, but I know I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The student uses present tense 'don't have' and the unclear phrase 'when wireless cheat'. The context is a past time (childhood), so past tense 'didn't have' is required (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). Also 'when wireless cheat' is not meaningful; replace with 'when I was a child' to match the question. Suggestion: Use past tense for events in the past and keep time expressions consistent. Grammar problem type ID:6

× In fact, I literally see bikes or cycles or eco bikes, motorcycles, everything every day I see in my country.

✓ In fact, I see bikes, cycles, e-bikes and motorcycles every day in my country.

The original sentence has awkward word order and redundant repetition ('every day I see' and 'I literally see'). This is a sentence structure and redundancy issue (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Also 'eco bikes' is better expressed as 'e-bikes' or 'electric bikes'. Suggestion: Remove redundant words and arrange items in a clear list, placing the time/place phrase ('every day in my country') at the end for natural word order. Grammar problem type ID:26

× It's very popular in my country.

✓ They are very popular in my country.

The pronoun 'It' refers to multiple items (bikes, cycles, motorcycles), so a plural subject requires plural verb form 'are' and plural pronoun 'they' (Grammar Problem Type ID 27). Using 'They are very popular in my country' correctly matches subject and verb number. Suggestion: Ensure pronouns agree in number with the nouns they refer to.