Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap net ve tutarlı değil; cümle yapısı bozuk ve anlamsal belirsizlikler var. İlk olarak doğrudan soruya kısa ve açık bir konu cümlesiyle cevap verin (ör. "Yes, I had a bike"). Ardından 1–2 destekleyici cümle ekleyin: bisikayı kimle veya nerede kullandığınız, ne sıklıkta sürdüğünüz ya da neden sevdiğiniz gibi spesifik ayrıntılar verin. Gereksiz doldurma seslerinden ("uh", "umm") kaçının ve tek bir cümlede fazla fikir biriktirmeyin. Bağlaçlar (because, so, when, with) kullanarak ifadeleri mantıksal şekilde bağlayın. Cümle sayısını 3–4 ile sınırlayın ve kelime seçimini basit ama uygun tutun.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it with my friends around the neighborhood after school. I liked cycling because it made me feel free and energetic.

提案: Cevap belirsiz ve ifadeler karışık; net bir görüş belirtip bunu gerekçelendirin. Önce kısa bir doğrudan cevap verin (Yes/No/Somewhat), sonra nedenini açıklayın ve mümkünse bir örnek veya karşılaştırma ekleyin (ör. şehirde mi daha popüler, kırsalda mı?). Yine dolgu kelimelerinden kaçının ve bağlaçlarla mantıklı akış sağlayın (for example, because, however). Cümle sayısını 2–3 ile sınırlayın ve spesifik kelimeler kullanın (popular, common, in rural areas, in cities).

例: I think bikes are quite common in rural areas but less popular in big cities. In villages many people use bicycles for short trips, but in cities people prefer cars or public transport because distances are longer and traffic is heavy.

× They decided and uh, I could buy clan high 80 years old and uh, we, umm, we played uh, with children.

✓ My family decided I could get a bike when I was about eight years old, and we played with the other children.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure problems: unclear subjects, incorrect age expression '80 years old' instead of 'eight years old', and awkward coordination 'They decided and I could buy'. The corrected sentence clarifies the subject ('My family decided'), uses the correct age expression ('about eight years old'), and links the two ideas with 'and'. Suggestion: break long fragments into clear clauses with a single subject for each, use correct number words for ages, and remove fillers like 'uh' and 'umm'.

× No, no, no, not uh, umm, it's uh, it's may really use, uh, people living country.

✓ No, not really; people in rural areas use them more.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and has unclear phrasing like 'it's may really use' and 'people living country'. The correction uses the pronoun 'them' to refer to bikes and a clearer noun phrase 'people in rural areas'. Suggestion: identify the noun being referenced and choose the appropriate pronoun, use clear noun phrases ('people in the countryside' or 'people in rural areas'), and avoid filler words.