Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (singular/plural), and add one specific detail about memories or where you rode. Keep answers under five sentences and use a linking word to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was seven, and I learned to ride in our quiet cul-de-sac. Because of that, I could explore nearby streets and visit friends easily, which made me very happy.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with a linking phrase. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'rural areas' instead of 'countryside') and avoid vague phrases like 'very'.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. One reason is that public transport is limited in rural areas, so people use bicycles for short trips; moreover, cycling is an affordable and healthy way to commute.

× When I was a child, I was able to ride a bike because my parents bought me one and I was able to learn them.

✓ When I was a child, I was able to ride a bike because my parents bought me one and I was able to learn to ride it.

The original uses 'learn them' which is incorrect: 'learn' followed by a verb requires 'to' plus base verb (learn to ride). Also 'them' does not agree with the singular 'a bike'; use 'it' for the bike. Suggestion: use the structure 'learn to + verb' and match pronoun number to the noun. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× And it also made me very happy to be able to roam around my streets and.

✓ It also made me very happy to be able to roam around the streets near my home.

The original sentence ends with a trailing conjunction and lacks a complete object ('and.'). This is a sentence structure error. Also 'my streets' is awkward; use 'the streets near my home' or similar. Suggestion: remove the dangling 'and' and provide a clear object or phrase to complete the sentence. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× I think bikes are really popular in my country because commuting is very hard and is also not suitable in many areas, especially in the countryside.

✓ I think bikes are really popular in my country because commuting is often difficult and not suitable in many areas, especially in the countryside.

'is very hard and is also not suitable' repeats the verb 'is' unnecessarily and 'hard' is less natural than 'difficult' in this context. Use 'often difficult and not suitable' to improve fluency and keep present tense consistent. Suggestion: avoid repeating 'is' and choose more natural adjectives. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Bikes are very convenient and are very healthy to use.

✓ Bikes are very convenient and very healthy to use.

Repeating the verb 'are' is unnecessary; it's grammatically correct but stylistically redundant. Also 'healthy to use' is acceptable but could be clearer as 'good for your health.' Suggestion: combine predicates after a single subject: 'Bikes are very convenient and very healthy to use.' or 'Bikes are very convenient and good for your health.' Grammar problem type ID: 13}]}}