Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сформулируйте ответ более грамотно и последовательно: укажите возраст чётко, используйте корректные времена и артикли, исправьте ошибки в словах и порядке слов. Добавьте связующее слово перед уточнением и одно конкретное подробное воспоминание (например, где вы катались или какая была рама). Избегайте лишних повторов («gifted my»).

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was about seven. I usually rode it with my sister because I was too young to ride on my own. For example, we often cycled around the park near our house on summer afternoons.

提案: Используйте правильные формы глаголов и более подходящую лексику: замените «become wild» на «very popular» или «widespread», согласуйте времена и число. Добавьте связку и конкретную причину или пример, чтобы обосновать мнение (например, пробки или забота о здоровье). Устраните междометия («uh») и повторы.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. Many teenagers and adults own and use them regularly, mainly because traffic congestion is bad and cycling is cheaper than driving. For instance, people often cycle to work or school to save time and money.

× Yes, I had a bike in my childhood I was just like aids or sevens and I usually ride it with my sister because I was too young to drive it alone and this bike gifts gifted my.

✓ Yes, I had a bike in my childhood. I was just like eight or seven and I usually rode it with my sister because I was too young to ride it alone and this bike was gifted to me.

Several past-tense errors and related mistakes: 'I usually ride it' should be 'I usually rode it' to match past time frame; 'drive it' is incorrect for a bicycle, use 'ride it'; 'this bike gifts gifted my' is ungrammatical — correct passive past is 'this bike was gifted to me'. Also break run-on into two sentences and correct number words: 'aids or sevens' likely meant 'eight or seven'. Suggestion: keep verbs consistent in past tense when talking about childhood and use passive 'was gifted to me' for receiving an object. Please note: use 'rode' (simple past) for habitual past actions and 'was gifted to me' for a past passive event.

× Yes, uh, bikes become wild in my country.

✓ Yes, uh, bikes have become very popular in my country.

Incorrect verb tense and word choice: 'become wild' is not appropriate; use present perfect 'have become' to express a change over time leading to the present, and 'popular' is the correct adjective. Suggestion: use 'have become' when describing trends that started in the past and continue now, and choose the correct adjective 'popular'.

× Every teenager and even adults have ride their bikes.

✓ Every teenager and even adults have ridden their bikes.

Incorrect verb form after present perfect auxiliary: 'have ride' is wrong; use past participle 'ridden' after 'have'. Also consider subject-verb agreement and article use: 'Every teenager and even adults' is awkward; better: 'Teenagers and even adults have ridden their bikes.' Suggestion: use 'have ridden' for present perfect and match noun phrase number.

× I don't know why this is become so popular, but yeah.

✓ I don't know why this has become so popular, but yeah.

Incorrect auxiliary for present perfect passive/active: 'is become' is incorrect in modern English; use present perfect 'has become' to indicate a change resulting in the present. Suggestion: use 'has become' or 'has gotten' for trends that changed over time.