Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct and natural, but it is very brief. To improve, add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., who gave it to you, what kind of bike it was, or a memory) and use a linking word if you add extra information. Keep the total to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a red bicycle when I was seven, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood every afternoon. It was a simple single-speed bike, but I remember feeling very proud of it.

提案: Your answer addresses the question and gives reasons, which is good, but it has repetition, some grammatical errors, and lacks specific examples. To improve: remove repeated phrases, correct plural/singular forms, add one concrete example or statistic, and use linking words (for example, because/so/for instance). Keep to 3–4 clear sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short journeys. For instance, many students cycle to school and delivery workers use cargo bikes for quick urban deliveries. As a result, you can see bicycles parked everywhere in city centers.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use them for commuting or short trips because they are cheap and convenient and you see and you see them everywhere, especially among student and delivery worker.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use them for commuting or short trips because they are cheap and convenient, and you see them everywhere, especially among students and delivery workers.

Errors: repeated phrase 'and you see' is redundant (sentence structure error but corrected as part of fluency), and 'student' and 'delivery worker' are singular nouns used where plural quantifiers are required. According to the quantifier/plural rule, when referring to groups in general use the plural form 'students' and 'delivery workers'. Also add a comma before the final 'and' to improve clarity. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general groups and avoid unnecessary repetition; rewrite to 'you see them everywhere, especially among students and delivery workers.'