Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Start with a clear direct answer, then give a concise timeline with correct grammar. Keep it to 2–3 sentences, use past simple for past events, and avoid repetition. Include linking words like 'then' or 'after that' correctly.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. When I turned 18, my father gifted me a motorbike to commute to school, and I’ve owned it since then.

提案: Give a direct opinion, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Use correct subject-verb agreement and more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'motorbikes', 'commute', 'adults'). Use linking words like 'because', 'for example' or 'also' to structure support and avoid vague phrases like 'big persons'.

例: Yes, I think motorbikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to commute. For example, many students and office workers use motorbikes to travel to school and work, and families often use them for short visits to relatives.

× No I know I have any type of bike when I was child but now the day when I was I'm 18 year old then my dad gifted bike to me for going to school then after the that's I have the my own bike after the 18 year when I was.

✓ No, I did not have any kind of bike when I was a child, but when I was 18 years old my dad gifted me a bike to go to school, and since then I have had my own bike.

This sentence contains multiple issues; the primary grammar problem type is incorrect use of pronouns and related sentence structure errors (use of 'I know', 'any', 'the my', and incorrect tense forms). Specific problems: 'I know' is incorrect for past possession and should be 'I did not' (negative past). 'Any type of bike' is awkward; use 'any kind of bike'. Missing article before 'child' and wrong tense 'when I was child' -> 'when I was a child'. 'Now the day when I was I'm 18 year old' is ungrammatical; intended meaning is past time 'when I was 18 years old'. 'Gifted bike to me' should be 'gifted me a bike' (word order and article). 'For going to school' -> 'to go to school'. 'Then after the that's I have the my own bike after the 18 year when I was' is redundant and ungrammatical; simplify to 'and since then I have had my own bike.' Suggestions: break into clearer clauses, use correct past simple for past events ('did not have', 'gifted'), include articles ('a child', 'a bike'), and use 'since then I have had' to show continuity from a past point to present (present perfect).

× Yes, I thinks bikes are popular in our country because many people use the motorbike for going to their relatives and going to schools and the bikes are also used by the big persons for going here and there.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because many people use motorbikes to visit relatives and go to school, and bikes are also used by adults to travel around.

The primary error is third person singular: 'I thinks' is incorrect because the verb should agree with the subject 'I' and be 'I think'. Other related issues: 'the motorbike' and 'the bikes' unnecessarily use the definite article; use plural 'motorbikes' or 'bikes' without 'the'. 'For going to their relatives' is awkward; use 'to visit relatives'. 'Going to schools' should be singular 'go to school' when speaking generally. 'Big persons' is incorrect; use 'adults'. 'For going here and there' is informal and can be replaced with 'to travel around.' Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement, avoid unnecessary articles, choose appropriate nouns ('adults'), and use more natural collocations ('visit relatives', 'go to school').

× That's why I think that the bikes are popular in my country.

✓ That is why I think bikes are popular in my country.

This sentence is understandable but has a minor article and contraction issue. 'That's why' is acceptable in speech but written correction 'That is why' is clearer. Using 'the bikes' implies a specific set; use 'bikes' generally. Suggestions: use 'bikes' without 'the' when speaking about bikes in general, and prefer full 'That is why' in formal responses.