Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve by giving a fuller, natural response with one topic sentence plus a supporting detail. Avoid one-word answers. Include when you had it or how you used it, and a linking word to connect ideas. Keep it to no more than five sentences.

例: Yes, I did — I had a small blue bike when I was about seven. I used it almost every day to ride to a nearby park and visit friends, which helped me become more confident and independent.

提案: Make the answer more fluent and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence that states your opinion, then add a specific reason and an example using linking words (for example, however, because). Remove hesitations and avoid fragmented sentences.

例: I think bicycles are fairly popular in my country, although they compete with other sports. For example, many people use bikes for short trips and exercise, but team sports like football attract more participants, so bikes are common but not the most popular.

× Yes, I had.

✓ Yes, I did.

The examiner asked a yes/no question in the past ('Did you have a bike...'). In responses to do/did questions in English, we normally use the auxiliary do/did rather than repeating the main verb: 'Yes, I did' or 'Yes, I had one'. Saying 'Yes, I had' is grammatically possible but sounds incomplete without an object ('a bike'). Use 'Yes, I did' for a short answer, or 'Yes, I had a bike' to include the noun. Suggestion: reply with 'Yes, I did.' for a short answer or 'Yes, I had a bike.' for a full sentence.

× Despite the fact that other games are more popular than bicycles.

✓ Although other sports are more popular than bicycles,

This fragment begins with a subordinating conjunction ('Despite the fact that') but is not connected to a main clause, creating an incomplete sentence. Also 'games' is less natural than 'sports' when discussing popularity of bicycles. Correct the sentence by combining the subordinate clause with a main clause: 'Although other sports are more popular than bicycles, (I think...)'. Suggestion: attach a main clause after the comma, e.g. 'Although other sports are more popular than bicycles, I still think bicycles are common.'.

× Uh, I think bicycle was umm, popular enough.

✓ I think bicycles were popular enough.

The speaker mixes present-tense 'I think' with past-tense description. When you express a present opinion about past facts, keep 'I think' (present) and use past tense for the fact: 'bicycles were'. Also use the plural 'bicycles' to refer generally to the mode of transport, and move 'enough' after 'popular' is acceptable but cleaner as 'popular enough'. Suggestion: say 'I think bicycles were popular enough.' or if expressing a current opinion about current popularity, 'I think bicycles are popular enough.'.

× Popular, yes.

✓ They were quite popular, yes.

The fragment 'Popular, yes.' is an incomplete sentence and lacks a subject and verb. To be grammatical and clear, include subject and verb: 'They were quite popular, yes.' or simply 'Yes, they were popular.' Suggestion: provide a full clause, e.g. 'Yes, they were popular.'.