Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Corrigez la grammaire et la fluidité : utilisez le prétérit pour parler du passé (« I didn’t have » est correct), évitez les fautes d'accord et de conjugaison (« couldn’t own ones » ➝ « couldn’t afford one » ; « I usually work with my friend and borrow it one » ➝ « I used to play/work? with my friend and borrow his bike »). Structurez la réponse en une phrase principale claire et une phrase de détail. Utilisez des mots précis (e.g. borrow, lend, afford, receive). Par exemple, commencez par une phrase directe, puis ajoutez un détail temporel et la conséquence ou un petit récit pour enrichir.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn’t afford one. Instead, I often borrowed my friend’s bike to ride to the park. A few years later I received my own bike as a birthday gift, which made getting around much easier.

提案: Améliorez la précision et la cohérence : évitez des expressions imprécises comme « too popular » (qui a une connotation négative) ; préférez « very popular » ou « quite popular ». Utilisez des mots précis pour les avantages et une structure avec un lien logique (« because », « so »). Ajoutez un exemple concret ou un comparaison pour enrichir. Par exemple, commencez par l'opinion, puis donnez deux raisons courtes reliées par des connecteurs.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because they are cheap and help people avoid traffic. For example, many commuters prefer cycling for short trips, so bikes are common in city centers and near schools.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn't owns ones.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn't own one.

The modal verb 'couldn't' must be followed by the base form of the verb, so 'own' (not 'owns'). Also 'ones' is incorrect here; use the singular 'one' to refer to a single bike. Improve by using base verb after modals and choose singular/plural to match meaning.

× I usually work with my friend and borrow it one I eventually receives a bike as a gift.

✓ I usually rode/worked with my friend and borrowed it, and then I eventually received a bike as a gift.

The student is talking about childhood habits and past events, so past tense verbs are required: 'usually rode/worked' (choose the appropriate verb), 'borrowed', and 'received'. Also 'receives' is third person present, incorrect for past narration. Use consistent past tense to describe past routines and events.

× Yes, I think it's too popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country.

The phrase 'it's too popular' is unidiomatic here and 'it' incorrectly refers to plural 'bikes'. Use plural subject 'bikes are' and 'very popular' instead of 'too popular' unless intending to express excess. Ensure subject number matches verb.

× They have a benefit to save time and avoid traffic cars.

✓ They have the benefit of saving time and avoiding traffic and traffic jams.

The structure 'have a benefit to' is incorrect; use 'have the benefit of' followed by a gerund. 'Avoid traffic cars' is unidiomatic; use 'avoid traffic' or 'avoid traffic jams'. Use gerunds after 'of' in this expression.