Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail. Use correct tense and avoid redundancy (e.g., "I did have" → "I had"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and fix mistakes such as "I'm no longer have" → "I no longer have one."

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, especially during elementary school. However, I no longer own one because I moved to a city where I travel by public transport.

提案: Answer directly and give a clear reason with a specific example. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example") and correct word order. Avoid vague phrases like "the transport is in support." Instead say public transport or infrastructure. Limit to 2–3 sentences and be specific about why biking is unpopular.

例: No, bikes are not very popular in my country because the cities lack safe cycling infrastructure. For example, there are few bike lanes and heavy traffic in Indonesian streets, so most people prefer motorbikes or buses.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child, like in the elementary school, but currently I'm no longer have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, like in elementary school, but I no longer have a bike.

The sentence mixes past simple with an unnecessary did auxiliary ('did have') and then incorrectly uses 'I'm no longer have' which combines present continuous with base verb. Use simple past 'had' for a past possession and simple present 'no longer have' for current state. Also remove the article 'the' before 'elementary school' unless referring to a specific school. Suggestion: Use 'I had' for past possession and 'I no longer have' for present lack.

× Actually in my country is not popular to use a bike because the transport is in support.

✓ Actually, in my country it is not popular to use bikes because public transport is well developed.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject ('it') and uses the unclear phrase 'the transport is in support.' Replace with a subject 'it is' and a clearer reason. Also use plural 'bikes' for general statements. Suggestion: Start with 'Actually, in my country it is not popular to...' and give a clear explanation, e.g. 'because public transport is well developed.'

× To use a bike like for example like a street or in Indonesia especially doesn't support that.

✓ For example, using a bike on streets is not well supported in Indonesia, especially.

The phrase 'to use a bike like for example like a street' is ungrammatical and misuses prepositions. Use 'using a bike on streets' to show location and 'is not well supported' to express lack of infrastructure. Place 'for example' at the start of the clause. Suggestion: Say 'For example, using a bike on streets is not well supported in Indonesia.'