Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer repeats the examiner's question instead of responding. To improve, answer directly with a clear topic sentence, add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word, keep it concise (no more than 5 sentences), and use varied vocabulary. For example, begin with a simple statement about whether you had a bike, then add a detail such as when you got it or how you used it, and finish with a short comment about how it made you feel or its importance.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was about six years old. It was a small red bike with training wheels, and my father taught me to ride it in our neighborhood park. Because I practiced every weekend, I quickly gained confidence and could ride without assistance by the time I was eight.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but is long, repetitive and has grammatical errors. To improve, start with a concise topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or examples using linking words (for example, 'because' or 'for instance'). Use precise vocabulary and correct grammar, and avoid redundancy. Keep your response to a maximum of five sentences and make supporting details specific (e.g., cite commuting, sport, or leisure as reasons for popularity).

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because many people use them for commuting and exercise. For instance, city residents often cycle to work to avoid traffic, and families teach children to ride as a common pastime. As a result, you can see many bike lanes and community cycling events throughout the year.

× Uh, yes, bikes are very popular in my country because most of the people like to ride a bike and in fact I also love to ride a bicycle and small children's also like to learn it very much and people are likely to spend some time with their bikes also.

✓ Uh, yes, bikes are very popular in my country because most people like to ride bikes. In fact, I also love to ride a bicycle, and small children also like to learn very much. People are also likely to spend time with their bikes.

Multiple issues: 'most of the people' is wordy; use 'most people' for natural phrasing (article error/word choice). 'like to ride a bike' should be plural 'ride bikes' to agree with 'most people' (subject-verb/number consistency). 'small children's' incorrectly uses possessive and apostrophe; should be plural noun 'small children' (incorrect use of apostrophe/pronoun). Sentence is run-on with several clauses joined by 'and'—this is a sentence structure error; breaking into shorter sentences improves clarity. Repetitive 'also' placement is awkward; move 'also' to natural positions. Suggestions: use plural nouns when speaking generally (bikes, children), avoid unnecessary articles, correct possessive/apostrophe usage, and split long sentences into shorter ones for clarity.