Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with tense and be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence in the past tense (since the question is about childhood), then add one specific detail. Avoid unnecessary words like “do” with past events.

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me for my eighth birthday, and I rode it to school almost every day until I was twelve.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain reasons with correct grammar and more specific details. Use comparative language correctly and avoid informal phrasing like “way easier.”

例: Not really. Bicycles are more popular in rural provinces than in big cities because rural areas have less traffic and shorter distances. For example, people in my hometown often cycle to neighboring villages, whereas city residents usually prefer cars or public transport.

× Yes, I do have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The examiner's question asked 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?' which is in the past. The student's response should use past tense to match the time frame. Using 'do have' (present) is incorrect here. Suggestion: match the tense to the question and say 'I had a bike' or 'Yes, I had one.'

× When I was a child, my father gave it to me.

✓ When I was a child, my father gave it to me.

This sentence is grammatically correct and already uses the appropriate past tense. No change needed. Explanation: 'gave' is the correct past tense of 'give' for a completed action in the past.

× Not really because it just popular in province, not in the cities.

✓ Not really, because it's just popular in the provinces, not in the cities.

Multiple issues: (1) Missing auxiliary verb 'is' causes a subject-verb agreement/structure problem — corrected by using the contraction 'it's' (it is). This relates to subject-verb agreement and sentence structure. (2) Use of 'just' is acceptable but word order and missing verb made the phrase ungrammatical. (3) 'province' should be plural or preceded by an article; in this context 'the provinces' is natural when contrasting with 'the cities.' Suggestion: include the verb 'is' and use 'the provinces' to indicate regions in general.

× It is more way easier to ride bike when you're in the province.

✓ It is much easier to ride a bike when you're in the countryside.

Problems: (1) 'more way easier' is ungrammatical; 'easier' is already a comparative, so modifiers should be 'much easier' or 'a lot easier.' (2) Missing indefinite article before 'bike' — should be 'a bike.' (3) 'in the province' is awkward in English; 'in the countryside' or 'in rural areas' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'much easier' + include article 'a' and use a more natural term for non-urban areas.