Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure: use past tense consistently and give a brief extra detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it concise (1–3 sentences).

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was seven, and I remember learning to ride it in the park near my house.

提案: Be direct and coherent: give a clear opinion, then support it with one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., because, for example). Avoid filler sounds and unclear phrases. Use correct verbs and nouns (e.g., "ride a bike", "learned to ride").

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and exercise. For example, cities have bike lanes and several community programs that promote cycling.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was seven years old.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was seven years old.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time expression 'when I was seven years old', causing a tense inconsistency. Use past tense 'had' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: match verb tense to time markers (e.g. 'when I was...') by using past simple for completed past events.

× MMM, probably. I think I want to bike biking, so I learned about how to bike with teaching in teaching with my.

✓ Hmm, probably. I think people like biking, so I learned how to ride a bike with the help of my parents.

The original contains multiple structural and word-choice errors: 'I think I want to bike biking' is ungrammatical and unclear; 'learned about how to bike' is awkward; 'with teaching in teaching with my' is incomplete. The corrected version clarifies the subject ('people' or 'I'), uses the correct verb phrase 'learned how to ride a bike', and completes the prepositional phrase 'with the help of my parents'. Suggestions: choose a clear subject, use standard verb patterns ('learned how to [verb]'), and complete prepositional phrases (e.g. 'with the help of someone').