Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and clear but can be improved by removing filler words, using a clear topic sentence, and adding one specific detail to make it more vivid. Keep answers concise (no more than 4–5 sentences) and use a linking word when adding extra information (for example, "because" or "so").

例: Yes, I did. When I was about six I had a four-wheeled children's bike that I often rode with friends in the residential complex where I grew up. Because the complex had wide paths and few cars, we felt safe and spent hours racing and exploring nearby gardens.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has hesitations, repetitions, and an unfinished ending. Improve fluency by removing stutters, giving a clear topic sentence, and adding a specific reason or example. Use linking words (for example, "because," "for example") to make your point coherent and finish the response fully within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in China. For example, in many cities there are rows of shared bikes that people use to commute to work or meet friends, because they are cheap and convenient for short trips.

× I remember when I was around six years old I had those 4 wheeled bikes for children which I would ride with my friends in the complex where I used to live in.

✓ I remember when I was around six years old I had those 4-wheeled bikes for children which I would ride with my friends in the complex where I used to live in.

The phrase '4 wheeled' should use a hyphen as a compound adjective before a noun: '4-wheeled'. This is a punctuation and word-formation issue that makes the modifier clear. Suggestion: use hyphens for compound adjectives (e.g., 'four-wheeled bikes').

× Yes, absolutely. I'm I'm originally from China and right now I live in Hong Kong, but when I whenever I go back to China, I can see streets of lined up shared bikes that people would use to go to work or just to meet up with their friends and it's.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I'm originally from China and right now I live in Hong Kong, but whenever I go back to China I can see streets lined with shared bikes that people use to go to work or to meet up with their friends.

This sentence has several issues: repeated 'I'm' (redundancy), unnecessary 'right now' placement, incorrect phrase 'streets of lined up shared bikes' and awkward use of 'would' and trailing 'and it's.' Corrections: remove duplicate 'I'm'; use 'whenever' without both 'when' and 'whenever'; rephrase 'streets lined with shared bikes' for natural collocation; change 'would use' to simple present 'use' to describe habitual action; remove trailing incomplete 'and it's.' Suggestion: keep sentences concise, avoid repetition, and use appropriate collocations and verb forms for habitual actions.