Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use correct tense and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two supporting details with linking words. Correct verb forms and articles, avoid repetition, and keep answer within 3–4 sentences. For example, say you had a tricycle, explain why (fear of two-wheelers), and mention a brief memory or result.

例: Yes, I had a tricycle when I was a child. I preferred it because I was afraid of balancing on a two-wheel bicycle, so the three wheels felt much safer. I remember riding it around my neighborhood every afternoon with my friends.

提案: Answer directly and use clearer structure: state your opinion, then give specific reasons and contrast different areas. Use linking words (however, because, in rural areas) and avoid filler words. Be more precise: mention cities vs rural areas, factors like traffic, infrastructure, or culture to support your view.

例: I think bicycles are not very popular in Malaysian cities, but they are more common in rural areas. In cities, heavy traffic and lack of bike lanes make cycling impractical, however in smaller towns people sometimes use bikes for short trips and exercise.

× Yes I do.

✓ Yes I did.

The question uses the past tense 'Did you have', so the response should also be in the past tense. Using 'do' (present) is tense mismatch. Change to 'did' to match past context. Suggestion: Match verb tense to the question; use past simple for past situations.

× I remember that when I was a child I on a three wheel bicycle back then.

✓ I remember that when I was a child I rode a three-wheel bicycle.

The sentence is missing the main verb 'rode' and uses awkward repetition 'back then'. Also 'three wheel' needs a hyphen as a compound adjective. Use the past simple 'rode' to describe a past habitual action. Suggestion: Include the correct past-tense verb and use hyphenated compound adjectives.

× Since I'm fear of cycling in two wheel bicycle, I prefer three wheel bicycle instead.

✓ Since I was afraid of cycling on a two-wheel bicycle, I preferred a three-wheel bicycle instead.

Several issues: 'I'm fear' is incorrect—use 'I was afraid' or 'I am afraid.' Because the context refers to childhood, use past tense 'was afraid' and 'preferred'. Use preposition 'on' with 'bicycle'. 'Two wheel' and 'three wheel' should be hyphenated as compound adjectives and include articles 'a'. Suggestion: Match tense to context, use correct adjective 'afraid', correct preposition 'on', add articles and hyphens.

× I could not say that my bikes are not popular in my country, but it depends on the area or region in Malaysia.

✓ I could not say that bikes are popular throughout my country; it depends on the area or region in Malaysia.

Original sentence has double negative/confusing structure 'could not say that my bikes are not popular'. The speaker likely means they cannot generalize that bikes are popular everywhere. 'My bikes' is odd; use 'bikes'. Use a clearer modal 'could not say' plus rephrasing to avoid conflicting negatives. Suggestion: Remove 'my' and avoid double negatives; clarify the intended meaning.

× In Malaysia, the cities are really crowded, then the cars are everywhere without seeing uh, significant value of bicycles.

✓ In Malaysia, the cities are really crowded, and cars are everywhere, so you do not see much use of bicycles.

Problems: 'then' is an ill-chosen connector; use 'and' or 'so'. 'Without seeing uh, significant value of bicycles' is ungrammatical and informal. Replace with 'you do not see much use of bicycles' or 'there is little use of bicycles.' Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Use appropriate connectors, remove fillers, and rephrase for clarity and grammaticality.