Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct, grammatical response with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Use correct verb forms and vocabulary (bike, not mic), and keep it concise (no more than 5 sentences). For example, state whether you had a bike, then briefly explain why or how you felt about it using linking words (because, so, however).

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Because my family lived in a busy city, my parents preferred I walk or use public transport for safety. However, I sometimes borrowed a neighbour’s bike to ride in the park on weekends.

提案: Answer directly and use natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes or No), then give specific reasons and one example. Use linking words (because, for example, therefore) and correct vocabulary (popular, common, many people ride bikes). Avoid repetition and incorrect grammar.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use them because they are inexpensive and convenient for short trips, especially in crowded urban areas. For example, students and workers often cycle to school or work to save time and money.

× In our childhood, I not, I did not have my mic.

✓ When I was a child, I did not have a bike.

The sentence uses incorrect pronouns and word order. 'I not' is ungrammatical; the negative past tense should be formed with 'did not' + base verb. 'In our childhood' is awkward for a single speaker; use 'When I was a child.' 'mic' is likely a typo for 'bike.' Suggestion: Use 'When I was a child, I did not have a bike.'

× Yes, in our country bikes are proper. Proper in our country because of most people are do you using bikes and bikes, the riders also using bikes.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because most people use them and many riders also ride bikes.

The original contains multiple sentence structure and word choice errors. 'Proper' is the wrong adjective; 'popular' fits meaning. 'In our country bikes are proper' has incorrect word order. 'Because of most people are do you using bikes' mixes structures and pronouns incorrectly; use 'because most people use them.' Repeating 'bikes' is redundant; replace with pronouns. The clause 'the riders also using bikes' needs a finite verb: 'many riders also ride bikes.' Suggestion: Keep sentences concise and use correct verb forms: 'bikes are popular,' 'most people use them,' 'many riders also ride bikes.'