Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, with a direct topic sentence and useful detail (age and who taught you). To improve, make the response more natural by using smoother phrasing and a linking word to connect ideas; keep it concise (no more than 3–4 short sentences). Also use a slightly wider range of vocabulary (e.g., "learned," "mastered," "since then").

例: Yes, I did. My father taught me to ride a bicycle in a nearby park when I was seven, and I learned very quickly. Since then I’ve been able to ride comfortably and often cycle for leisure.

提案: You answer the question directly and give a reason, which is good. To improve, expand with one more specific supporting detail or example and use linking words (e.g., "because," "for example," "as a result"). Avoid absolute statements without clarification. Vary vocabulary (e.g., "common," "prevalent," "congested"). Keep it to 2–4 sentences total.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many residential streets are narrow and congested, so cycling is often more convenient than driving. For example, people commonly use bicycles to run short errands or commute to work in busy neighborhoods.

× My father taught me in a nearby park how to ride a bicycle when I was 7 and after that I have been able to ride a bicycle.

✓ My father taught me in a nearby park how to ride a bicycle when I was seven, and after that I was able to ride a bicycle.

Mixing past simple ('taught') with present perfect ('have been able') is inconsistent because the action is completed in the past. Use past simple ('was able') to match the past time reference 'when I was seven'. Also spell out single-digit numbers as a stylistic suggestion. Ensure a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country. First of all, the roads are very narrow, so many cars can't actually drive through these roads that are near houses.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are popular in my country. First of all, the roads are very narrow, so many cars can't actually drive on the roads near houses.

Use 'bicycles' for a slightly more formal noun choice, though 'bikes' is acceptable. The main grammar issue is preposition usage: 'drive through these roads' is incorrect because you usually 'drive on' roads; 'drive through' is used for passing through an area. Also the relative clause 'that are near houses' is more naturally placed after 'roads' as 'the roads near houses' or rephrased. Replace 'these' with 'the' for general statements and remove redundant words for clarity.